7886863It was a promise. His intent was to give Twilight a feeling of consequences for her actions. As far as Twilight thinks, now, she isn't allowed back.
7887095 Still, the whole episode with them teaching Twilight "how it felt" felt very uncomfortable. Part of that is because everything moves at the same brisk pace. Thunderlane could've used some calling out on what he did, he could've thought about what happened, Rainbow could've thought about what happened, maybe they could've all talked longer, but everything goes by so fast, it lacks the emotional impact it could have.
Maybe I'm wrong, but it really feels like the story is speeding up and not taking as much time to let things play out as before.
7887824 The main reason Twilight's "enlightenment" session was shortened, was because she is not the main target of this section of the story. This is Softy's Kindness, the plot around Fluttershy's blossoming, about her finding a relationship that is stable and comfortable, about her feeling like the mare she wants to be, is the aim of this. Twilight is in here as a side character, although if I know my commissioner, they will likely have a story for her to star in, because she deserves spotlights.
7904584 The problem wasn't the acts and kinks but what is essentially voluntary slavery. It's just way out of character. I don't think Rainbow would mind getting dominated every now and then by somepony she loves *cough* (Twilight) but not outside the bedroom and humiliation is completely out of the question
Cue Dash buying a spreader bar for her own bed.
Thunderlane had better be wary or he might get bunnykicked in the ghoulies.
7886863 It was a promise. His intent was to give Twilight a feeling of consequences for her actions. As far as Twilight thinks, now, she isn't allowed back.
7887095
Still, the whole episode with them teaching Twilight "how it felt" felt very uncomfortable. Part of that is because everything moves at the same brisk pace. Thunderlane could've used some calling out on what he did, he could've thought about what happened, Rainbow could've thought about what happened, maybe they could've all talked longer, but everything goes by so fast, it lacks the emotional impact it could have.
Maybe I'm wrong, but it really feels like the story is speeding up and not taking as much time to let things play out as before.
7887824 The main reason Twilight's "enlightenment" session was shortened, was because she is not the main target of this section of the story. This is Softy's Kindness, the plot around Fluttershy's blossoming, about her finding a relationship that is stable and comfortable, about her feeling like the mare she wants to be, is the aim of this. Twilight is in here as a side character, although if I know my commissioner, they will likely have a story for her to star in, because she deserves spotlights.
Whoa, where did Twilight's lesson go? It feels like you missed a chapter.
Hey Angel, does Rainbow smell funny? One thump for yes, Two for no, Three for 'is that what that is?'
Thats the 1st time a non gore story almost made me puke...
No wait. The 1st time any story almost made me puke. This is just so not my thing ><
good writing though.
7904499 Ack, sorry to hear that. I did make sure to list the things going on in the description, did you not check it?
7904584 The problem wasn't the acts and kinks but what is essentially voluntary slavery.
It's just way out of character. I don't think Rainbow would mind getting dominated every now and then by somepony she loves *cough* (Twilight) but not outside the bedroom and humiliation is completely out of the question
7906687 Ah, no probs. Thanks for the heads-up.