excellent representation of bdsm so far. and an excellent representation of a sub in that situation. Very well done. its nice to see a bdsm story from someone that obviously knows what they are talking about.
Thunderlane could see the little sticky patched Rainbow had inflicted on both mares and couldn't help getting rock hard.
'patches' I think? Twi shouldn't have used the gag yet, not until she fully understands what she is doing. No questions, still too unsure about the bdsm thing to feel right asking anything.
7836831 Twilight being a bottom is more training than punishment. Thunderlane wants to make her realize how helpless a bottom is, and he is likely to push her right up until she has to use her safe word.
7836993Critiques are good, this is a flexible series in regards to focus, and yes, Thunder is the main player (his thing he has with Dash is going to be a constant), but the aim is to show how things go with Fluttershy getting an itch scratched that even the show itself showed she has.
As stated above, Thunder doesn't want Fluttershy to blame Twilight, but he intends to demonstrate in the best way he can think of, just how much attention Twilight needs to pay to her sub's needs. Missing a cue, especially a safe-tapout, is a really bad thing.
As for springing it, I was trying to give the impression of how wrapped up in their fun each of the ponies was, they were all in a happy place except Fluttershy. Admittedly, it wasn't a really bad thing, but she was uncomfortable and didn't like the situation, which is always a sub's prerogative. I am sure Twilight would have noticed eventually, as would Thunder when he turned around, but that is no excuse. Twilight was wrong in not paying more attention, and Thunder himself was wrong, since it was his dungeon and he was the senior (and teaching) dom.
At the end of the day, this is a clopfic, but I promise that I do take as many aspects as I can into account. I like to think I made what could have been another rape-power-trip fic, into something a lot sweeter and lot nicer.
You put Twilight in a situation where she has to use her safe word, so she understands how important it is to keep your pet always in the eye, especially if it can not speak.
7837052 Hmm, I would still love it if Twilight ended up being dom towards Thunderlane's other mares but stays his pet. Or oh, if they add Spike at some point and he becomes Twilight's master.
7837052 I was going to say that the situation did seem a bit like thunder manufactured it. Giving free reign on a second try is asking for disaster, especially if you aren't going to keep a close eye on things. In my opinion Thunder and Twilight should both apologise.
excellent representation of bdsm so far. and an excellent representation of a sub in that situation. Very well done. its nice to see a bdsm story from someone that obviously knows what they are talking about.
'patches' I think?
Twi shouldn't have used the gag yet, not until she fully understands what she is doing.
No questions, still too unsure about the bdsm thing to feel right asking anything.
hi,
that story is very good,i love this pet play
i hope you dont plan to make Twilight a pet, i dont think that will work
Twilight as Mistress is a good idea, i like to see her own pet (Starlight Glimmer or Trixie per examble)
7836831 Twilight being a bottom is more training than punishment. Thunderlane wants to make her realize how helpless a bottom is, and he is likely to push her right up until she has to use her safe word.
7836993 Critiques are good, this is a flexible series in regards to focus, and yes, Thunder is the main player (his thing he has with Dash is going to be a constant), but the aim is to show how things go with Fluttershy getting an itch scratched that even the show itself showed she has.
As stated above, Thunder doesn't want Fluttershy to blame Twilight, but he intends to demonstrate in the best way he can think of, just how much attention Twilight needs to pay to her sub's needs. Missing a cue, especially a safe-tapout, is a really bad thing.
As for springing it, I was trying to give the impression of how wrapped up in their fun each of the ponies was, they were all in a happy place except Fluttershy. Admittedly, it wasn't a really bad thing, but she was uncomfortable and didn't like the situation, which is always a sub's prerogative. I am sure Twilight would have noticed eventually, as would Thunder when he turned around, but that is no excuse. Twilight was wrong in not paying more attention, and Thunder himself was wrong, since it was his dungeon and he was the senior (and teaching) dom.
At the end of the day, this is a clopfic, but I promise that I do take as many aspects as I can into account. I like to think I made what could have been another rape-power-trip fic, into something a lot sweeter and lot nicer.
Exactly how far along is Rainbow Dash in her pregnancy? It's been a while since it was mentioned at all.
7837736 Heh, only a a few weeks, not even close to showing.
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OK thanks, now I understand what your plan is.
You put Twilight in a situation where she has to use her safe word, so she understands how important it is to keep your pet always in the eye, especially if it can not speak.
Then I wait anxiously for the next chapter.
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Hmm, I would still love it if Twilight ended up being dom towards Thunderlane's other mares but stays his pet. Or oh, if they add Spike at some point and he becomes Twilight's master.
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I was going to say that the situation did seem a bit like thunder manufactured it. Giving free reign on a second try is asking for disaster, especially if you aren't going to keep a close eye on things. In my opinion Thunder and Twilight should both apologise.
Looking forward to the next installment.
That's pretty clearly coercion, Thunderlane. He needs to be called on that.