To put it up short, I'm a 13 year old brony and is a youtuber wanna be, and reads my little pony fanfiction. I suddenly got sucked in to this world with my laptop and stuff that involves commentating about how stupid things are in this world and doing it anonymously does not help either. I don't know yet. But I know that something seems something is up and I don't what it is yet. I'll found out soon.
This involves mild language and pinkie pie breaking the 4th wall.
Readers discretion is in the advi - fuck this!
First fanfic as well, thought you need to know.
Proofreader: Herpaderpderp
cancelled because I ran out of ideas
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I'm not going to lie, this story doesn't seem that different than all the other HiE stories. How will this story be different?
Hey that's not true!
Mostly.
oh, man...mentions of Steven Magnet, the Ursa Minor, Twilight isn't a princess yet...this fanfiction is something straight out of season two.
This kind of fic, which used to be so plentiful back in the day, is woefully short on numbers now. I'm very glad that, if a little less in supply, there's still writers making their first forays into the world of fiction via horse romance stories. Thank you.
7792726 Think of it as a leafyishere clone in Equestria with things to make his content.
I don't actually mind if you don't like the concept. I just write because I want to write. that's it.
7794242 You and me both man.
The chase scene with Applejack was made so much better when I was listening to "What I'm Made Of" from Sonic Heroes.
I'm actually curious to see where this goes.
This is honestly one of the worst HiE's I've ever read.
Your protagonist is this cringy, edgy, 13 year old who listens to his music instead of doing what you'd expect someone in Equestria to do.
Also, Fluttershy refers to Angel as a "she," and you follow up by calling it a "him."
This is such a Mary Sue.
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Not really sure what you were expecting.
6 to 9 on the likes to dislikes ratio! New achievement! Yes!
7800503 For you to say that, it means I actually made the character the way I want him to be, and oh yeah thanks for the correction about angel's gender but I personally call her an IT. But thanks anyways, glad you had the time to critque the story.
How is there WiFi in ponyville! They aren't that advanced In techno-oh wait its pinkie never mind also what the heck is juke mode?
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I think he's writing the description in 1st person