On a mission from Princesses Celestia and Luna, Twilight and her friends are tasked with an expedition into unexplored regions of Everfree Forest in search of what is thought to be a large meteorite. While Luna was quick to rationalize the falling star, she felt a strange presence as the object passed over Equestrian airspace, so accompanies them on their journey. The girls follow a trail of scorched earth to the crash site. What they find is far more than mere space debris.
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congrats on the upload you deleted a post on warmth?
I almost want to say that this is a crossover with something, but I don't even know the supposed crossed-over topic.
In the meantime, I'll leave a few tidbits of grammatical brush-ups for you to consider.
"raised" should be "rose"
I get what you're trying to say, but for the sake of the present progressive following a complete clause, "succeeded" should be "succeeding."
After "situation," there should be a period. Then "sunrise" should be capitalized.
Within the realm of My Little Pony, that is supposed to be spelled as "Everfree."
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I did, I didn't mean to though. I must of forgot to put the comment back.
Lemme fix that. Apologies.
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Thanks man, I'll be sure to fix that. Let me know what you think of it
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I thought the crossover tag was for things from other tv shows and stuff?
Editing notes:
Javi's recommendations.
Readers feel free to also do so, the help is apricated!
7653811 TV shows, movies, games, other franchises... basically, the crossover tag is used when a story uses MLP elements in conjunction to other sources of media.
That being said, is this, then, a crossover? And if so, with what?
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It's not actually! It started out as pencil drawings before I made the cover art.
Had to shorten my original answer.
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How is it so far? It's far less messy than Finding my muse when I started it.
7654116 I can't quite say whether or not it will keep my attention, but I do like the premise. So far, it seems to be moving at a good pace.
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7655290 this is awesome. MORE PLEASE!
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More is on the way for both of my stories, friend.
Woo hoo! I love it!
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Thank you, any feed back is appreciated!
aw that so cute tori!
Honestly i don't know if I should add the Gore tag since weaver's arm is kaput, but since he's a robot, should it count?
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I don't think gore should be added because the definition of gore is blood that's been shed. Since he's a robot that doesn't really count unless you count robots as having humanity in them. It's kind of a you opinion.
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Thanks man, I assumed no one would give an an opinion. I completely forgot about that comment
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Your welcome. Well the comment was 12 weeks ago so ya lol. Happy I could help
Pardon my asking, but don't robots usually have a self-repair matrix? If so then say a spark of power hit him, not enough to turn him on, but enough to turn his subroutines on, wouldn't he begin to repair himself?
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He can't fix himself without proper tools. He's more of an AI in a shell than a robot
8194017 Ahh, thank you for clarifying that. I was actually kind of confused.
8194017 oh hey, you're alive!
Is this a crossover or unique? If a crossover, with what?
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I made it up. I drew a picture of a android carrying a little girl through the Ruins of London and made a story about it.
8195784 how very creative, I also have a new work of fanfiction of fanfiction.net.
The parts that were not Zootopia, are entirely made up. If you wish to see, PM me and I will send a link.
Yay a new chapter!
Can you do more please
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I am. Glad you liked it, lets see if anyone can piece together what mystery before it's revealed!
Well, damn. I took a long time coming back to this story--as of right now, I have over 300 unread chapters in my library--but I'm kinda glad I waited to re-immerse myself in it. So far, it has aged well; it has kept my interest despite the lull in updates, and I definitely look forward to more!
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Heck,mi figured no one would comeback at all when I posted the second chapter, but I was wrong. You and others have been adding, commenting and upvoting the story so I'm gonna keep going and hopefully have a proper schedule for writing, thanks man.