When Rarity discovers a gray hair in her mane she seeks out to obliterate it. She decide to go to Twilight to find a solution to her "aging problem". When Twilight use a special spell on her things get messed up big time
What will happen. read it and find out.
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There's alot of gramatical errors and a few spelling errors, might want to look over the story again but otherwise great job, the idea is interesting.
It's a great idea for a story. Something i'd expect to see as an actual episode. However your grammar and spelling make this fic impossible to read.
May you please consider changing when Twilight says cannot constantly.It seems a tad more Rarity to say that if you were to ask me in my opinion.
interesting idea, but you really need a editer.
It's nice really nice but grammar dude give it a reread or get someone to because the grammar throws people off a bit.
Other then that I like it
Shows promise so far, hope it gets better.
Seriously. I've said it before and I'll say it again. Why can't people on this site use question marks? THEY GO AT THE END OF QUESTIONS.
im loving it so far
lol, fluttershy is going to have a freakin heart attack and everypony is going to freak out. probobly like this: the horror the horror! eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
822841 shit, sorry. i thought I had question marks on all the questions. i'm going to fix it later.
Aside from the obvious grammar and stylistic mistakes, I thought that it didn't seem exactly credible that Rarity would automatically know that she had lost her talents in fashion upon realizing her cutie mark is gone--she had plenty of skill even as a filly (see The Cutie Mark Chronicles). Although it might be more of a problem with a stylistic delivery than consistency with canon-- I would have been more dramatic for Rarity to actually try to remember what she knew in order to determine she really had forgotten anything.
Still, not exactly a bad premise for a story.
823793
I agree! And it'll be fun so see what Fluttershy thinks about Spikes new appearance.
Needs more exclamation marks...
Oh, and while I'm at it: Hi, there!
How the heck did Spike become older while Rarity became younger?
824554 We meet again Mr WhatTheBrony (clap the back of my cat while wearing a eye patch.) and also hi there
825110 it will be explained in the next chapter.
824554Hello!
Good story
Keep it up!..but like everyone says get a editor
Wow! Nice!
But I agree with the others, you need an editor.
So all the adults are now foals and vice versa. I'm concerned mostly about the Cake's babies. Did two infants just become adults too?
OMG LOL
1217447 you could say that.
1217447 Yep!
Why do I get the feeling that everyone is going to angry at Twilight for being unaffected. Also I wonder if this would make Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon act more mature (but my guess is no)
I have a feeling that this went a bit further than ponyville...