Chrysalis is back! Only this time, she's finally decided to try out the peaceful way to get what she wants. Though she still holds ire toward the student and friend of Twilight Sparkle, the Changeling Queen has to find the strength within herself to do what must be done for her subjects.
Silver Skies is the lucky diplomat that gets sent to speak with Queen Chrysalis. The day these two ponies meet, each masters of their masks, will be the day things change for the land of Equestria. Exactly how those changes affect the land, remains to be seen.
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I started this little tale some time ago. It got set aside while I got absorbed into writing another story, but with the leak of the season 6 finale... oh, I just had to get working on this one again! So much creative urge just compelled me to write more! I hope you all enjoy. 
Interesting beginning. I like the main character and the canon characters seem well in character. Didn't spot a single error. Will continue reading. I hope the next chapter won't take too long to arrive.
Poor Chryssie, she'll learn first hand how boring diplomacy can be.
7637763 Thanks for the input. I try to keep errors and grammar within acceptable ranges. Chrysalis is one of my favorite characters to think about, too. Even with the leak she's remained a mystery (which is what sparked my creativity and rekindled this little story) so I've tried to emulate her properly. I'll be putting out the next chapter tomorrow.
Chryssie has the compulsive need to tiptoe around the truth.
Iron Barricade needs to go.
7639246 Chryssie is my favourite character in mlp.
7641672 I have to thank you for that comment. You just gave me an idea with the unicorn vs earth/pegasus in hand to hand combat. It'll be closer to the end of the story, but look forward to a neat conflict scene in the future!
7659757 Yeah, I prefer the black chitin look as well. I'll probably only touch on the new look for Silver's research purposes, but I really didn't want to use it... too much color!
I'm still undecided on what I'll have as an end result, but I did have a few ideas that would stick to the upcoming history in the next chapter.
Thanks for the feedback.
Interesting, so there's unrest in the ranks and the changelings are dying out... Hopefully they will be saved.
I agree with the comments above, the new designs are rather generic. It's like they're trying to tell us that to be good, you need to be fuzzy and / or colourful. The original changeling design is much, much more original and interesting.
You could just say that the transformation was temporary, the real change was loss of so the holes or simply no external change.
Interesting, and it gives a reason as to why Chryssie remains how she is. Hopefully, having access to the best magical minds will allow her to be treated and the curse, of not removed, then altered to allow her to feel more.
More lings!
Maybe it's because their emotional sense trigger his semifinal framework. For example their senses might probe around each 1/10th of a second to gather information about the emotions present. Maybe these are actually triggering his damaged emotions.
Ah, the traitor is mentioned.
When thinking of Thorax, I always hope that there are no fertile changelings amongst the new ones and that they're doomed to die out.
Save the hive, Silver!
I'm quite sure offing Thorax would help the hive mind greatly.
Nice chapter, good to see that the changelings that attacked him are reasonable.
7732014 Heh, it would be fun to snuff his life force out... sadly I still need him for an upcoming chapter. After his one time appearance he will no longer serve a purpose, and the tragedy can be rectified.
7732046 Or maybe five centuries of grub duty, of we want to be less morbid.
*cut to Thorax drowning in a literal hill of hungry grubs, only a hoof sticking out and twitching, with Chryssie reclining nearby and watching this with a 'I feel really good about my life right now' expression*
Tender is awesome.
It'd be fair if Thorax's hive also faced extinction.
Hmm, I wonder what's Winds like.
You cannot resist the ship, Chryssie!
'The Queen made her way strait to her bed.' I think you meant 'straight'.
7748570 Thanks for catching that. I made the correction.
I just read the story up to this point.
The good:
* Well written dialog!
* Good grammar.
* Interesting plot.
The bad:
* The main character feels like a Mary Sue. Having him be great at convincing others and combat and magic and having an instant interest between him and Chysalis.... The main character is too powerful and too good in too many diverse fields.
* Some of the internal dialog felt out of place. When we suddenly go from his viewpoint to Chrysalis internal dialog and back again felt clunky.
7760461 Yeah... I did make Silver a bit OP. I have what the cost/cause of his unique predicament coming up in a few more chapters, so hopefully it'll help to balance the field in that aspect.
As for the clunkiness... I apologize for that. I guess I failed to get the right flow with that area of my storytelling. If you could be a little more specific (as I'm struggling to picture it, which would make this subject a weak point in my writing) that'd be great. You can post here or pm me. I'm thankful for the feedback and I'm always looking to improve. As I've said to a few others, I'm still a developing artist when it comes to creative writing.
Well, that was quite good. Thorax is still a bastard, but less of one.
I'm all up for Chryssie fucking with him while maintaining a pleasant facade to get back on him.
Huh, so they've had no new children as well.
Welp, that went well.
Good job, Silverpants.
Well, that should be interesting.
Inb4 the spell no longer works.
7815063 Sadly, unless I ruin the ending with a spoiler, I can't completely explain an answer to that. What I can say is that even though Chrysalis' Changelings are still the black little guys we know and love, and Thorax's band are technicolor abominations, the two sides are still connected by the same aspect of the curse. My end goal is to get that part of the curse revealed, thus explaining why Thorax's side ever came to be. The act of giving love freely is only a part of that - there's more to it that will be explained in later chapters.
It lives!
Pretty nice chapter, I don't mind the shortness, at least it's resumed.
Wow, yeah, that's a problematic cutie mark. I wonder if he can kill himself by looking at it himself.
Oh, good. I was getting g worried after these past couple chapters. It was looking like you had spent all that time building things up with Chrysalis just to have a random princess come in and steal the show. I can't believe I had forgotten about the pheromones. At least Silver remembered before he lost control again.
Yay, new chapter, and an enjoyable one.
Well, changeling royals are quite stunning, with half a mile long legs.
... I'm suddenly reminded of a fic, third in a series, where Twilight and Chryssie were about to do it and it turned out that changelings mate like spiders. Chryssie was confused where Twilight's pedipals are and was disgusted by her equipment. :B
'and straitened out' - straightened
8091844 Yeah, I missed writing for this story. I'm happy that I figured out some material to resume it. ^_^
8091934 Indeed. Although... I'm still undecided on just how large a role Whisper will play. Part of what gave me my pause in writing for this story was creating her. Whisper quickly filled a place and her personality clicked with my creativity. Sadly, that created a conflict with how I originally wanted the story to progress. After taking a break and getting a fresh look at things, I'm pretty sure I can get a good flow going again. Hopefully it's an acceptable one.
8092087 lmao, I may have to find that, it sounds funny. Thanks for catching that error as well.
Well, Sunbutt's done fucked up.
Chryssie may be sneezing a lot back at the hive.
'came strait to her' - straight
8117937 lol thanks for that. I always mix those two spellings up.
Nice Story, hope you will continue it when you have time
Yay, it's alive!
>.> Maybe Whisper was trailing him on the ceiling. :B
... Why did I hear the word 'breed' in DBZA Nappa's voice?
Bad, bad Oddling! *swats with a rolled up newspaper* Never be careless with medicine. Especially if it's related to stuff like clinical depression (just taking a stab in the dark here).
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Yeah, it's mainly for depression. I've got a few other things mixed in (no thanks to the undiagnosed mental problems on
that thing that dares try to call itself myfather's side of the family) but mostly I struggle just to stay stable emotionally. It's why I've been having so much trouble writing for this story. I can't get my head back into the right state of mind to reconnect with Silver's personality, so I can't really write anything and be satisfied.Good news is that I'm meeting with my new doctor this morning, so hopefully he and I can tinker with my meds and get me back in a more stable frame of mind again.
Also... I lost it when you said that about Whisper following him on the ceiling. Just picturing that was too funny.
8397008 "It's not like I'm following him because I like him, baka!"
Ah, depression, I know this beast well, but I inherited it from my mother's side.
Best of luck. I'd suggest a huge rubber mallet.
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Lmao! That was awesome, thanks for that laugh.
And the appointment went well. Turns out I need to drink a lot less energy drinks when I'm at work and we're going to see if adding another antidepressant will help stabilize things.
... I really should invest in a rubber mallet as well. They're so useful!
This has been one of my favorite stories on this site so far. I would love to see it being continued.
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Glad you like it so far. I do plan to keep it going. In fact, I've already started writing for the next chapter, though it's been slower going than I'd like. My new med seems to be leveling my head into a better state of mind for getting back into Silver's character, but I'm not quite there yet. I've had to delete some of what I've written because the feeling behind it leaned more towards personalities from my other stories.
On the up side of things, Shifting Mask's next chapter is almost to a thousand words, so you might be seeing a new chapter in a week or two.
I like.
Update soon?
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Maybe... I've got about a 3rd of a chapter written for chapter 16 so far. It's been hard finding the time and/or proper motivation to get back into my other stories. I'll try to get something out when I have the time.
...They had a topic?
I know. I understand that this story wants to be all mysterious and intriguing, but everything feels so...grey and lacking in enthusiasm.
Any plans to continue this story Oddling?
if the Thorax revolution is canon for this universe, then how is it that Chrysalis has so many unreformed changelings? This chapter explained why Chrysalis itself remains the same as it was before, but does not explain why the others have not changed. Initially I thought Chrysalis just built a new hive, but it also states that Chrysalis can no longer lay eggs. (By the way, it would be nice to also reasonably explain why Chrysalis lost this ability. The answer "It's just necessary for the script" I don't like.
Shone*
Also, you kept using Strait instead of Straight throughout
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