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Okay, good book so far, one tip: proofread your chapters and such, I found multiple errors. You missed putting quotation marks in many places and two words would be combined when they were meant to be separated. Anywho... Good so far, rate 8.5/10 keep up the good word friend! javascript:smilie('
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sorry about that, when I checked through it, it wasn't so messed up. I have no clue how that happened.
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Thank you. as for the errors, when I put it from notepad (my MS word is broken) on to the site, it double spaced everything. so when I fixed that some things might have gotten messed up. and some things that are messed up I have no clue how they happened, It wasn't so messed up when I submitted it. I will take care when uploading the next chapters.
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All in all just keep up the good work my friend
I'm interested in seeing where this goes!
Since you are going to be more careful in your future submissions, I would like to offer up some typos I found. :D
1. Luna, right after transformation, yells: "NO ONE CAREs FOR ME!"
2. A paragraph or two down, it states: Twilight Awoke...
3. Lunar Eclipse has a few comma and quotation spacing issue in a few sentances.
4. Some more comma spacing issues during Snow Moon's self introduction.
5. Mostly, the problems seem to be capitilization and spacing problems that may have arisen during submission as you stated.
I hope this helps! Add more exclemation marks!!! ;) Twilight is in a state of shock and panic, and as such, some of her statements do not seem to reflect her mood during the situation because of the punctuation.
Good luck with your future chapters!
update soon please