While Twilight Sparkle was trying spells found in an old book on chaos magic she is sucked into a vortex the spat her out somewhere she knew nothing about. The world of NCIS.
She meets a team of criminal investigators who learn about who she is, and now she is forced to put her trust into them.
Now, with her new friends, she must find a way home while solving crimes, murders, and enduring all the DiNozzo jokes she can handle all the while hiding her true identity from the others.
Can she keep from getting captured, shot, or going insane long enough to get home, or will her time with the NCIS team be the end of her journey, permanently.
Cowritten project by Me, Rainboom, and Draco.
This was Draco's idea and I learned about it through a art request!
Cover art was made partly by me, but will be changed in the future!
Well I guess things are going to be weird enough for Gibbs and the team this time. Looking forward to more soon.
You don't realize how much you want a story until you read it. Thank you for this
. Just one question...
Why Caitlin? I miss her.
Story is too fast, a lot of repetitive wordd, phrases and context, also too many plots conviniences without explanation, these kind of fics are very complicated, and you started with the wrong foot, yoh seriously need and editor and proof reader, or a lot.
Of... Of all the things... Humanity never ceases to amaze.
needs an editor.
A little rushed, but I want more.
I've got a few things... It's a good idea and after a few changes it would be a real interesting story concept.
when I think about it he wouldn't call Tony he would call Cate 
First: Gibbs wouldn't drag her to the HQ he would take her home and call dinozzo to come by and help him ...
Then: god you've just written a solid summary of the first three chapters. (I would have ended the first chapter with Gibbs stopping his car)
take it slow and describe every detail regardless of how trivial you think it is. You can't write to much and you show to much. Let your readers figure some things out by themselves.
(For example you could let the reader figure out that Gibbs had a blanket in the back of his car while writing how he left the car and opens the door to the passengers space.)
There is a lot going on here and you definitely need an editor. Don't get me wrong I love your idea but you have to rework it ^^' do this(rework it, describe more, show less, etc.) And I will give you a thumbs up and definitely a follow
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Thanks, we all knew we needed an editor of some kind, but that's easier said then done ya know? It's harder to find one now. We just got too excited and wanted to post it, but trust me, this was already remade like 3 times. Just goes to show, it's much harder to tell when something seems good with no help.
We might try to rewrite this, but I won't give any promises as I will need Rainbooms help.
I might take this down or leave it up.
doth my eyes deceive me an NCIS crossover with best pony and best NCIS crew FUCK YES ABBY AND TWI are going to get along like a house on fire
7576851 i think leaving it up will help with finding an editor
need morrrrrrrrreeeeeeee now
7576555 caus Da'vied(sorry cant pronounce her name) would have shot her
7577152 Ziva David? Makes since I guess.
7577207 thats the one i just remember her last name cant for the life of me spell it though
As I finished reading the chapter I closed my computer and reached for the small bottle under my bed that read "Only for the most Emergency of Gitty feelings", ...... This will help.
Can't whait for more! Keep it up! :)
this is something we should have added at the end of the chapter.
Are you writing a crossover between MLP and the best crime show, which I happen to have watched since I was 8? Because it looks like you're writing a crossover between MLP and the best crime show, which I happen to have watched since I was 8.
From the short description:
Gibbs will deliver the patented Head Slap of Doom (TM) to Twilight at least once.
(Also, the "to" in the above quote should be "two.")
I'm really expecting Abby to lock herself in the room with twilight to try and protect her.
7577152 well that and there is another reason for it being set at this point in time with kate instead of Ziva
7581195 your far closer to the truth than you think.
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Hmm, what's that supposed to mean huuuuuhhhh!
7588627 Abby and twilight. DiNozzo also as well
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In that case, oh mystical one, when the next update for this is?
7588667 soon, I think, but soon. and let me say this, things are about to get strange
If it still feels rushed or lacks description, sorry. Not so easy doing an n.c.i.s crossover. But we'll get there and get better as the ball starts gaining momentum.
Interesting so far. One nitpick but several time in this chapter the letter "i" was left uncapitalized.
It feels slightly rushed, but compared to the episodes it's really good. Could use a little editing, but love it so far.
“So, you're a magical pony princess from another world and don’t know how you got here? Yep, I’ve gone mad.”
Instead of disbelief he simply said to DiNozzo, “DiNozzo, make sure you clean up after her.”
Thank you for these
7589915 your welcome. however, I will warn you the horse puns are about to take over
7589935 I'm amazed they haven't already. Especially with Tony involved.
7589968 my excuse to the lack of puns is they are still reeling from disbelief and Tony thinks he's going crazy seeing a magical talking pony princess.
they are about to return with a vengeance.
*some
Your hired Grammar Nazi says you messed up. *remembered
Great chapter otherwise.
now the truth is starting to show and something other than a failed spell is in the works *wink* *wink*.
7593580 thanks for being our hired grammar nazi* lol
I'm sure Ziva and Tony would be proud. Even if they don't know it yet.
One question...
If Twilight is a pony how is she going to join NCIS?
7607870 You will find out soon :) And that name was HARD to find, before we had Tara 'Twilight' Strong (No Joke)
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That's awesome. (Until you get copyrighted)
7607891 One reason we didn't use it lol
What's a DiNozzo?
7608144 Hes a person....
Well this is going to be one heck of a ride. I can't wait to see how the NCIS team reacts to meeting Celestia, or Discord.
Special Agent Caitlin Todd? Why have her in the story when you have Ziva DaVeid in the cover art?
Ps I have no problem with any of the girls of NCIS but Ziva is my favorite
7608555 That is just a Temp Cover art for now until I get something made.
No one and now No PONY can surprise Gibbs.
7608144 Go head smack yourself
*Your
How did noone see this before?
7619730 We don't pay much attention....
7619916 It's my job (more or less) to pay attention so... No hard feelings, k?
Well at least Twilight is planning ahead. I hope she can fit in well enough that nobody questions her quirks. Now I wonder how Celestia will react to what happened to Twilight?