They used us, They destroyed our home, our family and friends, burned in the fires of war and greed. I'm Excalibur and unlike most, me and my team hunt down relics of the Orokin.
But after one mission almost killed me and stranded me on a planet from the distant past. I need to become the hero again. But I'll soon learn what it feels to have friends again and maybe even more.
But I don't know if I'm ready to forget the past and I don't think the past is ready to forget me. This is my story of how a group of idiots saved the world from utter chaos.
NOTE:
this story will take longer for updates due to my priorities being set on the Main Story's progression.
this also does not tie in with the main story in anyway besides from a few short appearances.
WARNING: CONTAINS STRONG LANGUAGE
Also the cover art was something I found on the internet I only added the name.
This is pretty good story
Heyyy, thats pretty good.
I will probably not continue reading the story but I will however leave some constructive criticism. Punctuation is not an optional thing and you need to end all sentences with it. The only exception would be when someone is speaking, then you'd end like this:
"This is an examle,"
See the comma used there at the end?
"This is also an example," Said the voice in my head.
Same thing here: A comma inside the quotation marks but the part after still ends with proper punctuation, also note that the S in said was capitalized.
Now go out there and improve while keeping those that continue to read happy.
Why do the cops always think that the Tenno are terrorists?
Friendly word of advice, link to the main story.
TFS Pun
Interesting start here.
Artifact.
Against
Needs comas after/ before names, and certain intro words along with the transition from a quote to the word 'said'.
"Insert sentence here," he said.
For names.
"I fucking hate you, Ordis."
You need capitalization on some words.
I don't know if it was intentional or not, but this chapter has a large similarity to my first chapter.
Lastly, you could use a little more detail and have you ever played Warframe?
A Chroma, Valkyr, and Excalibur... two of them fighting a dragon that is out of his right mind...
hmmmm...
Terrorists, heroes and human experiments. I can see.
A Russian Dragon?
Warframe: The Planet Equin Incident, Chapter 39, second paragraph just after the three stars.
Just a thought but shouldnt Limbo use the Latron or the Sybaris? After all he is a gentleman. Also probably use the Destreza.
Are the warframes wearing clothes or are these the operators?
7746764 the warframes are like power armour so the Tenno can take them off
we interrupt this warframe fanfic to bring you:
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7746764 you think they could get away with wearing clothes over their frames and go Unnoticed?
7800832 I doubt that.
Personality British..... ok then
Huh, that's strange. The prologue was written fairly decently, but then this chapter looked like it was written by a drunken monkey on crack, meth, and acid that hasn't slept in 5 days and just ran 6 miles. In other words, this chapter was written horribly. It's rushed, character interactions are inane (that means stupid), and why would the police assume that the Tenno are terrorists, especially when a few of them just saved their asses from a giant monster that was apparently Chroma for some reason? Why would they immediately befriend a guy for just existing and walking around, and why would Twilight trust him enough to tell him about the portal?
7747174 no..no they aren't. how the tenno and warframe interact was explained during the second dream quest line. but they certainly aren't just taken on or off like power armor is.
7828000 think of it as an alternate reality were the warfames are suits of armour rather than semi-conscious weapons of hyper-death
7828088 if that's the case then the author should ad the AU tag to the tags list.
7823709 its not the best the farther you read.
NINDUS! THE IMMORTAL MUTATION WILL THRIVE!
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i may or may not be a huge Nindus fan... only mag ranks higher..
i'm surprised it wasn't nindus who fought back so hard.
*hen again it might just be the fact i love playing as nindus more then almost all the rest but idk...
7973128 you hear about limbos' new rework he could rape Nidus anyday.
I may also be rather bias.
7973186 maybe, but that's if he didn't get his mutation up before, at 25 he dose 959 or so with his Virulence. not to mention, his Virulence would be a distraction as he regen's with his gun or fists.
7973210 You're getting rather serious there, I was merely introducing some friendly banter. I also don't play enough warframe to understand half of what you just said but i'm going to assume you're correct.
7973230 sorry, i guess i have a bit too much of a set of feelings for nidus. sorry.
but just so you know, he has four attacks, the first, wich i listed above is a straight aoe attack that gets stronger the higher his mutation lvl is. the second binds foes in place, the third binds jplayers together for healing and defence, and the fourth which i listed also is an aoe attack with minnions attacking
I like the story so much but when are the rainbooms coming back in the chapters?
damn right, everyone knows Twilight is WAY to good to have to settle on Flash.
so you're just killing off tenno now, eh.
I POWDERED MY COCKATIEL FOR THE RIB CAGE SLAUGHTER!!!
What is that weird thing in the picture?
The Zeramin wasnt a project, it was an accident. As the war was underway the first ships that intented to leave the Origin sytems ended up having a catistrophic accident. This doesnt tie to the actual lore of the game except for children surviving. And the fact that everyone has a name and powers that would relate to their abilities is wrong too. Along with the fact that Operators only have a few powers in game. Because this story has lore and as does the game, they need to be tied together unless there are holes. Which in the case of The Second Dream, there are none.
8124493 I understand, this is just my own spin on it. That and 'Multiverse Theory'.
Vegeta. Vegeta. Vegeta. Vegeta.
You should point out where you got your Idea's from
Chroma Personality: Heavy(TF2)
Made my Day
Yeah, I have a feeling those 2 words had to do with her and necros getting it on.
Didn't expect this. What a pleasant surprise.
Is there going to be a sequel story?
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Debatable, depends if my friend decides to take up where I ended. Ironically, their name is mine with a space
I am Heavy Weapons Guy
+1mouth? Sir you only NEED 1 mouth
Like I said need only 1 mouth not 3!
Better
The return of the mouths
I am the guy that with mere buttons control your very being
Your argument is more invalid
Ah come on not again
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