Love is a powerful emotion, but even love has it's limits.
Vinyl and Octavia are as close as can be. Sure you can look past each other's flaws and see the beauty in each other just the way you are. But what if that flaw is too much to look past? The wild, alcoholic party tendencies Vinyl tends to exude may push the limit, but with not one ounce of responsibility to back her up, not to mention the countless broken promises and childlike actions stacking up on a daily basis, Octavia has had enough.
Now Vinyl, a mare deeply rooted in living in the moment, forgetful, and irresponsible, must grow to understand a harsher reality without love, and learn to appreciate the world more so than she did before.
Warning: Some reviews obviously contain spoilers.
Well written, but truly a savage ending. Hoping to see if another chapter may fix this one!
Well, Vinyl had this coming. Now, she is finally going to see and feel the consequences of her actions.
Vinyl is in for a VERY long and rough road ahead. I'm just afraid that sooner or later, Vinyl may try to take the quickest way off the road.
Happy to know someone's enjoying it.
Wow... goddamn. I mean, I want to feel bad for Vinyl, I really do. But I've been exactly were Octavia's at several times in my life, so I'm definitely on her side on this one.
That being said, I think that this is going to be good. I can't help but hope that Vinyl gets her shit together and makes it up to Octavia. But I have a feeling that a happy ending may be just out of reach for these two.
Okay, after the first chapter I was hoping Vinyl had gotten a much needed wake up call. How wrong I was, I mean... getting drunk? Going to a strip club? Come on Vinyl... Though I suppose it's my own fault for hoping that something as small as Octavia packing up all of her shit and leaving would be enough to get her to see that she has a real problem. Can't say it's not realistic though, in fact it's extremely realistic, so props for that.
Though by the end of this chapter, it appears that Vinyl's finally starting to figure things out, of course that could just be me being too hopeful. Can't wait for the next chapter to see what the case turns out to be.
I'm absolutely ecstatic to see that this story is getting such good reception!
Thanks guys!
Beauty deserved to get the shit slapped out of her. And she's lucky that's all Vinyl did. I'm afraid Vinyl will never get over Octavia. I also don't Vinyl can ever 'grow up' either because a mental or emotional block is preventing her from doing so or she just doesn't know how or where to begin. The longer this story goes, the more I worry for Vinyl's life.
Ah, yes, when it comes to times like these, you wake up in the morning with the firm knowledge that it's not going to get any better until you go back to sleep again. Very saddening, even if Vinyl did this to herself...
Wow, I know she was trying to help her friend and stuff - albeit in her own stuck-up way - but Beauty Brass was a real bitch here...
A pity about the ending, too. It almost seemed like Octavia was actually willing to hear Vinyl out, despite her acting out of anger due to Beauty Brass' blatant spite.
Also, I like the Frogger reference
This story is very well done, I'm looking forward to more!
Well done. Hope there's more of this Vinyl deserved more rep.
Definitely looking forward to more of this
Gambling, win.
This is a great way to show that realistic moment in everyone's lives where you realized you messed up. Also a great way to show how someone is going to see how fast they can get to their more important obligation.
You can ignore this next comment as I know nothing about concerts or anything having to due with the classical music world, but this seems a little to short to be a concert. All of the ones I've heard stories about from friends who attended these events usually have to sit through more than just thirty minutes. Now these were big concerts, so I don't know much about Octavia's specific event. Just thought I'd point this out. I would suggest extending these events to an hour or so, at least this way with Vinyl being late (if that happened again), Octavia can really hammer home the point that Vinyl had plenty of time to show up even after the event had started. Again, I know nothing about concerts like this so feel free to ignore this comment.
Very well done with this scene right here. I could just picture this entire scene playing out in both a comedic way and also a very, very serious way. Also can I just say that the tone just fits really well. I could feel the stare coming from Octavia even though I am just a reviewer.
Very realistic memory here. I can understand why Vinyl did what she did in this situation and while I can agree with both mares on the subject of this memory, I have to ultimately give this a win without rambling on about why I'd agree with both of them.
Now I'm not saying Vinyl missing out on events like this is good, but Octavia did ask for the events Vinyl attended in the past year. The past three months qualify. I'm also curious as to how the incident with the fire alarm panned out.
Actually, I'm very interested in that event because it sounds like one of those things you laugh about in the future. 
Very good way to get a laugh out of the reader as they probably pictured something hilarious...and then they stopped laughing because Octavia was mad. 
Delaying a harsh answer to make your partner suffer even more despite them already knowing what it will be, and as much as I hate to say this especially since it's happening to Vinyl...good job.
As far as first chapters go with romance or break up type stories (I don't know if they will get back together so I don't know how to classify this one) like this, you did good, you got straight to the point instead of spending a chapter or two devoted to the downward spiral they were about to take. This is also a good way to set up for a possible conversation between the two later on if or when they meet up again.
This opening scene feels a bit off. I don't particularly like this next topic I'm about to dive into, but I will pass on the information. Vinyl sitting here while Octavia packs and leaves is fine, in fact I believe Octavia is very strong to realize their is a problem with their relationship and knows it's time to leave and put some space between them. However, having Beauty Brass show up shifts this scene to make it feel like Octavia is leaving an abusive (and a rule of thumb with that is a person should never leave alone) relationship. Now not being able to depend on your partner is bad, but it can be worked around, and from what it sounds like this relationship is being strained only be Vinyl not being their for her partner and everything else seems to be good (save for the outbursts and impulse control at Octavia's events that Vinyl seems to lack) at least as far as I've read. hat being said if this scene was just Octavia leaving (minus Beauty Brass) it would feel fine, but add in Beauty Brass and this feels like Octavia and Vinyl are in an abusive relationship with each. You could even have kept Beauty waiting by the wagon and it feel less like what I've gone over. To clarify, this isn't a bad scene, but it just feels off to me.
There should also be a period after "acknowledgment," not a comma. 
Concern for the mental health of your friend after they went through some tough stuff, two thumbs (...hooves?) up for this!
Helpful advice, win.
Forgetting your troubles...or being sleazy...or getting ripped off...or...Win?
Double win? I don't know, good job either way. 
Exercise, win.
Honesty, win.
Overall this was a good chapter, aside from what I pointed out at the beginning, there wasn't really anything off about this chapter. In fact Vinyl coping the way she was attempting to was very realistic as well as the sudden memory during her...fun time. At the end of it all Vinyl just wants to forget it all and that is a perfect example of a realistic scene. I could go on with praising most of what felt realistic, but I think you get the idea. I'm also glad to see Vinyl has a friend willing to go well out of their way to make sure she gets the hurt out as keeping it all bottled up like she is trying to do is not healthy. I will say that having Beauty Brass as Octavia's friend and being the one to give her the place to stay, really sets up what could be a conflicting conversation between her and Vinyl later in the story...which could lead to all kinds of "fun" times.
Being a big brother, sticking with your friend and putting their needs before your own, double win.
Concern for your friend and once again sticking around with them, that's another double win. I also want to add that you are really showing how Vinyl has a good friend willing to go the distance to help her out. Good job!
Great description!
Overall this is a great way to irritate the character as well as the reader!
I've read this part twice and it always gets to me the way the stallion speaks to Vinyl as I'm pretty sure this is a public place. Good job on this, getting emotion from the reader is always a win in my book! 
This is just wonderful. You really gave Vinyl an extra layer or characterization here by making it so that she questioned if she was the bad guy or not. This to me shows that Vinyl is more than just a party mare and does want to fix what went wrong with her relationship. Very good work here and of course earns you a Win.
Using logic, win.
Feeling apologetic and wants to talk things out, very mature for Vinyl.
I'm giving you another Win for this as Beauty really gets to me the wrong despite her good intentions for Octavia. Also Beauty needs to be referred to the above statement with the Celestia icon.
I can't believe I'm saying this, but good one for honesty.
Despite preferring never to resort to violence...who am I kidding, WIN!
You can ignore this next comment, but just in case you decide to have Beauty take Vinyl to court for "assault" as this is a drama story, I just want to point out that I believe I read earlier that Vinyl wanted Beauty to keep her hooves off of her, if that's the case then this is a fight as "assault" is defined as unwanted forceful touch which means Beauty started it.
Great third chapter! There were plenty of moments that got some feeling out of me and getting some kind of feeling from your reader is always a good thing!
I have to admit that Beauty Brass certainly adds an interesting element to your story any time she is involved. Out of all three chapters currently out, I have to say this one is by far your best. It has gotten the most feeling from me and that is something that really makes a story good! The only real complaint is that there are only three chapters out right now. 
You left your readers with a bit of a cliff hanger and that, while it can be good, is not good here because that leaves readers wanting more and there isn't any. 
So to recap, great job, you've done very well with this story thus far and there is hardly anything to really complain about other than the few things I've already talked about.
Good job!
I found this quite enjoyable. Nice story. Keep it up!
Noticed your amazing comment on my story "Symphony of the Damned", and just now noticed you also wrote your own stories. Thanks for that, by the way. Really made me and Benny's day.
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It was a review well deserved. It's only until the last week that I can even look at the title of it without feeling a bit sad in the pit of my stomach. Still my favorite Fimfic.
Can't wait to see how this turns out
Any idea when the next chapter is showing up?