• Member Since 28th Mar, 2016
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Di-o-S


Start with a mess of words and ideas for a story then clarify so it makes sense.

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Sky Streak and Midnight find themselves in the middle of a desert, alone. Not knowing how they got there or where they are they traverse the vast expanse in order to find a way home. This proves to be more difficult than anticipated.

NOTE: Story undergoing massive rewrite, the old chapters will still be up, but they are no longer going to be the first chapters. This will be removed once I have made the change, said change will happen at an unmarked date.

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It was good, but it indeed could use another chapter to answer some questions left.

Im enjoying this story alot, but im feeling a little confused at times.:fluttershysad:

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but im feeling a little confused at times.

Which parts seemed the most confusing? I can try and clear it up. :twilightsmile:

7929017 around the parts at the ruins is where you lost me, as well as the location.

7931128 :facehoof: Apologies, that part was a bit rushed. I'll rewrite it clearer, and with more clarity as soon as I'm able. :twilightsheepish: As for the location, Khalil mentions it at the end of the chapter:

"We are currently at the Inlomes Mountains"

The ruins are underneath those mountains. Hopefully, that cleared some things up. :twilightsmile:

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