Stay with me....

Fluttershy, afraid of how her friends would react to learning of her relationship with Discord, must make a decision. Unfortunately, neither will be happy with the result.

He just wishes she'd stay with him....

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Sk1Tz

Sk1Tz #1 · Aug 12th, 2016 · · 2 ·

It's a decent read. However I felt that the connection between the two wasn't love, but obsession. And Fluttershy breaks her canon character. A lot.

Fluttershy wouldn't distrust her friends. She wpuld believe that they would understand. The way the story made Fluttershy's friends to her out to be monsters just didn't felt right.

Speedy Silverstreak

Speedy Silverstreak #2 · Aug 12th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Write a sequel.

SprocketProductions

SprocketProductions #3 · Aug 12th, 2016 · · 1 ·

I'm personally not a fan of the Fluttercord ship. It honestly rubs me the wrong direction because the characters are too different. But I will give this read a chance, maybe it'll surprise me.

SprocketProductions

SprocketProductions #4 · Aug 12th, 2016 · · ·

Okay, first off, I was a bit taken aback by how well written it was. I noticed no typos and the grammar was honestly not bad. There were a few flaws which made it seem more natural, so it doesn't really need any fixing there.

I did notice a lot of repetition in the story, as if you couldn't think of more words. I suggest a thesaurus. It would really bump up the overall quality of the story quite a bit. Though I act as if I have room to talk XD

Once I got past my thing about the not liking Fluttercord, I could appreciate the story a little better. It wasn't bad. The theme is very simple but effective. I was confused by the context toward the start, but through the course, I got it figured out. I think it could've been executed a bit better. Some setup would not go unwarranted. I had mixed feelings at the end of it, as I wanted to know what would happen, but it also seemed more like it was focussing on the emotion, and there would likely be less of it afterward.

Overall, it's not a bad story by any stretch, but it's certainly not winning any awards. And it definitely didn't make me like the Fluttercord ship.
No, if you want me to like a Discord ship, I'm more of a Dislestia fan.
I will say that I did appreciate this read as a good story though.

SprocketProductions

SprocketProductions #5 · Aug 12th, 2016 · · ·

I'm also going to give this story credit for making me think of one of my favorite songs:
http://youtu.be/pB-5XG-DbAA

Berry Delight

Berry Delight #6 · Aug 12th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Dang, snowy! I didn't know you could write something so emotional! : (seriously, this made me cry a bit.)

Snowy Song

Snowy Song #7 · Aug 12th, 2016 · · ·

7473207 it's not making them out to be monsters, but you have to admit, only Fluttershy truly treats Discord as a friend in the show. the others always (with the exception of What About Discord? and even at the end they kinda went back to square one) show distrust and annoyance around him. they're reluctant to accept just friendship from him, how would they react to the fact one of their friends is in a relationship with him?

Fluttershy just wants to make sure they'll be fully accepted as a couple before telling anypony because she doesn't want to take any risks, that's all. i never meant for it to come across like she thinks her friends are cruel or anything.

Snowy Song

Snowy Song #8 · Aug 12th, 2016 · · ·

7473217 there... isn't really anything more to write, at least that i feel. but i am planning at least one other Fluttercord one shot (unrelated to this most likely; it'll be more of a comedy too) sometime.... eventually

guess you liked it then?

Snowy Song

Snowy Song #9 · Aug 12th, 2016 · · ·

7473273

I was a bit taken aback by how well written it was.

thanks! i've been getting some tips from my pff (proofreading friend forever ) and spent an hour going over it again and again to make sure it was ok.

I did notice a lot of repetition in the story, as if you couldn't think of more words.

sorry bout that. i don't have the biggest of vocabularies and i'm really young so yeah.... also was just going for something simple.

No, if you want me to like a Discord ship, I'm more of a Dislestia fan.

nooooooooooo! fluttercord forever!!!!!!!

glad you still found it readable though.

Easy breezey

Easy breezey #10 · Jul 9th, 2017 · · ·

Great job on the story! Didn't get me as much as I hope it would, but you did a great job on writing sonI'll give you three cakes 🍰🍰🍰 hope you loke it

Princeling