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GoldenChaos


I'll be good! I'LL BE GOOD! *rocks back and forth*

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Fluttershy and Discord have had a harmonious marriage for over forty years. Even though they have gone through several ups and downs, Fluttershy and Discord remained true to one another. Unfortunately, as with most ponies, Fluttershy's life begins to reach its end. How will Discord get through this painful event? Is their love truly over?

Sometimes, strong relationships can transcend lifetimes.

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Friendship wont last forever

but the one thing you do have is memories

:moustache: Where was I?
:duck: Foal sitting
:facehoof: More like hybrid sitting
:flutterrage: Discord! I changed my mind
:rainbowderp: What about me?
:twilightsmile: Moosh in the dirt, You were a mud golem before it rained
:ajsmug: After that we had a little trouble finding you
:derpytongue2:

A good start. I'm looking forward to where this goes.

Nice Part 2. Keep up the good work!

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Thank you!! Hoping that you continue to enjoy the book :)

Fluttershy was now an old mare, much to Discord's dismay. Fluttershy's once vibrant, pink locs were now stark white, <SNIP>

You appear to have accidentally omitted the 'k' from "locks".

Discord's sadness did not go unnoticed by Fluttershy. His normal mannerisms throughout the last few years have ceased, and he rarely jokes around with her anymore. She could see the pain in his eyes, and it hurt her greatly.

Perhaps she sees them in her minds eye? She is blind after all. Also, I find it an interesting choice that Discord can't at least snap away cataracts. I dunno... maybe not that, but I do hope you won't under sell his power or have Fluttershy be refusing that sort of help on the grounds of "aging is natural"?

"No, this is just a normal part of aging," Fluttershy replied. "Ponies cough all the time."

Bleh... well, it IS fairly par for the course for this sort of story.

"No," Fluttershy replied firmly. "You know how I feel about this. I believe that nature should take its course."

Let me put this bluntly: I consider this tantamount to suicide. He is morally obligated to act against her wishes... Actually, THAT is a story I would like to see. She wouldn't be willing to commit traditional suicide, but would keep trying to get him to undo the changes. Then eventually come around to his (and Twilight's?) point of view. Maybe I should write that myself? Ah, so many worth projects in my life, so little energy.

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