Discord is sick with a mysterious disease, and only Fluttershy can help!
That is, if she wasn’t on a trip to see the Breezys. Instead, he must resort to Nurse Redheart, who happens to have an odd affinity for the draconequus. Can their budding love outstand their differences, or will a missing Pinkie Pie drive them apart?
Based off of a prompt from a podcast by the Good HiE List group. Check them out, they’re awesome!
Thanks to ChappedPenguinLips and RogalDayne for editing and all of their support!
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What a strange little story, maybe I'll give it a read when I get the chance.
A very cute ship! Good luck with the contest.
very very cool to see such an unique and most of all unexpected ship like that work out :D
really nice and sweet little story you got there ^^
i for one enjoyed it and would like to see a sequel one day ;3
At the risk of being That Guy, Redheart is an earth pony, as your cover art demonstrates.
In any case, I'm afraid I just couldn't get into this story. There's no reason for Redheart's infautation, Discord demonstrates many spells that the potion should block (most notably the portal,) and none of the characters feel like themselves.
Still, thank you for participating, and best of luck in the judging.
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Thanks for the feedback!
Yea, I’m aware of the unicorn issue -- that one line was a remnant from an old edit that I forgot to change. The romance... was something I just didn’t have a better idea of how to write. With practice, that’ll improve... hopefully! :twilight blush: Same goes for the OOC. In a perfect world, I should’ve planned out Redheart and kept her personality consistent throughout the story (as I tried to do with Discord). However, I just wrote her all at once and hoped that she’d stay the same. Oops.
I think the potion works correctly though. Discord spawns the portal, and then drags the alien out with his paw. As the potion only blocks the “owner’s ability to manipulate the location of objects, especially in regards to teleportation”, spawning in items (the portal, costumes, etc.) is perfectly legal. (That being said I don’t doubt that I missed one or two instances of Discord moving stuff around).
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Thanks!
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Ooh, sequel. Hmm. I’d have to write some other stories before revisiting this one :pinkie happy: