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Twilight composes a letter to the Princess about a terrible Hearth's Warming gift.

Featured on Equestria Daily, 23 June 2012.

First Published
22nd Jun 2012
Last Modified
22nd Jun 2012
#1 · 122w, 6d ago · · 1 ·

??? Da heck? I'll see about it.

#2 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

cool story...wheres nocturne :flutterrage:

#3 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Beautiful.

#4 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Nicely done DH, nice to see you hit your stride again.

#5 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Touching, with deep themes as well as shout outs (and jabs) to your previous work. See now that you made it so obvious I actually got it and it made me feel good! :eeyup:

#6 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

This story brought tears to my eyes. Now I need to find something a bit more lighthearted to read.

#7 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:  I really should have paid more attention to that sad tag.  I was crying for most of the story.  In fact, I even had to change my music because it was just too happy for what was going on.  But it was a good thing, because it was definitely cathartic.  Thank you very much.  This story was amazing.

#8 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Very sad and painfully reflective of real life. Dare I say someone is projecting? In any case stellar work.

I'm trying to think of something more to say but that's all that I'm coming up with at moment.

#9 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

dkfjsnkfandkf

damn it device...

I'm going to go hug my parents now.

#10 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Ah, a wonderful work... Just the right amount of a twist, and I particularly enjoyed the message.. A great little piece of fiction, all-in-all. You ought to be proud of yourself. :twilightsmile:

#11 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Hmm, so any parallels here to the relationship you have with your own parents?

On my side, I regularly feel like Twilight at the end, that I really should love and appreciate my parents more for what they do for me. It's something that I've managed to improve on a bit here as I've entered my twenties.

#12 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

I don't know how to express how I feel right now.

Today is the five year anniversary of my father's death. I've got an awful lot of empathy for Twilight right now.

This story meant a lot to me. Thank you for writing it, and sharing it with the world.

#13 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

That was excellent. It flowed well, and the transition came suddenly and honestly it gave me a little jump. Certainly not an expected turn of events.

Loved the story; it captured well the essence of a one-shot - I don't feel a want to read the letter she dictated. Not only because Twilight said so, but also because it would be a moot point. Ending stories like that is not only effective but also meaningful. :twilightsmile:

#14 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

MUST READ NOW. :pinkiegasp:

Edit: Wow... Amazing.

#15 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

That was wonderful.

#16 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

This was a rather exquisite piece, even at far too early in the morning.

Good work, can't wait to see more from you.

#17 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh man... Oh man. I'm pretty sure it's impossible to lose close family, parents especially, and not feel guilty or regretful of all the things you didn't do or say. :ajsleepy:

#18 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Much ado about nothing

#19 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

It's jus the embodiment of how much my parents and I never really got along.

Just, not just.

A truly touching story. I can only say that the idea of a family member is used to much, but I had never read one quite like this. There was a couple parts that I had to stop myself from crying. Reminded me to much of a dream I had...

#21 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Well. That was unexpectedly awesome. Not that anything from you isn't, but this one was especially so. Nice to hear that you're feeling better as well, device.

NTL
#22 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Nice one!

I'll leave a longer review, once I'm not at work anymore. Because I totally do not read pony fiction at work... :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft:

#23 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

The problem with this sort of story is that, now I've just finished reading it, I want to go and tell my parents, my family, just how much I love them. But I don't know how to. Not really. I feel bad for not having said it in the past but.. because it's not a thing I do, I don't know how to do it in the future. So I'm going to sit here, sad and fearful for what is coming in the years ahead. *And then go see them in the evening, and tell them anyway.

(I spotted a single letter missing from the end of a single word but cannot find it now, so... magic I guess)

(Edit: Ahh, it's been found. I read that paragraph a few times in my search for the missing letter and completely missed it, but I do tend to autocorrect for typos a lot of the time. So much so that even when reading something out loud and actually trying to figure out what wrong with a sentence, I will say what's supposed to be there instead of what is. Not the most annoying problem to have.)

And now I realise that I didn't actually comment on the quality of the fic itself.  -  It's good, Mr Heretic. Your work continues to shine.

#24 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

>>790083 I know...

The word is just. He wrote it jus. Just look at my last comment.

#25 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Very nice. Simple and well-executed.

#26 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Your good at forcing me to take a step back and look at my life.

Thanks for witing

#27 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

For some reason this story made me think of my dad.

He'll be 62 in a few weeks, and with his health problems I'm honestly not sure how many years he has left ahead of him.

I don't know how I'd be able to take his eventual death, especially since I'm only 19 at the present time. It's odd how this story made me think of that. It's not sad, but it certainly is most... depressing.

I'm glad you left the details of Twilight's parents' death vague; it wasn't really the focus of the story, but the fallout from it was.

I am depressed and also strangely apathetic. I don't like the void you've made in my emotions.

#28 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

I always appreciate how well you depict somepony in a state of emotional distress. You do suffering well.

#29 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

>>790069

The first one a genuine typo, but the other two are correct the way they are - even "We are none of us perfect." It's a common variant of the famous quote "We are none of us infallible, not even the youngest of us."

#31 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh gods. The moment I read the word 'headstone'.

#32 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Goddammit Device, every time I read one of your stories I cannot help but look at my writings in progress and think "what crap!"

Also: "Anyways" :ajbemused: Really? Infinite pet peeve.

#33 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

My poor heart. D:

#34 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Brilliant work, device.

#35 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

If you want my words on this, go check my blog. I would never put those kinds of words into a comment.

#36 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Something about the prose seems... "off" at certain points. I'll have to re-read it to pin-point where.

A nice read nonetheless, and a worthy message.

#37 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

A great story. I spent a long time trying to settle on what I felt was a suitable compliment, but I keep focusing back on not what it is, but what it does. Yes, it's well written, emotional, and touching, it seems to flow well, I definitely enjoyed reading it. I get a little touchy whenever someone bumps Twilight's parents out of her life and sticks Celestia in their place, like they weren't the ones who raised her, who supported her studies and got her to that entrance exam in the first place, so I loved seeing that tackled head on. I'm sure I could keep going.

But it's the effect it has on the people who read it that really seems the most important to me. There are other stories on FIMFiction that are thought-provoking, or that can make people step back and reconsider how they've been handling or interpreting things in their lives (some of your own other works included), but precious few of them will ever actually move someone to action. I think this story is one of those few. I can already see it in the comments above me, and I know I'm going to hug my own parents extra hard when I visit them this weekend.

So the best compliment I can give, in my mind, is that your little one-shot has actually done something. And that's rare.

#38 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

I really liked this one.  It was simple enough and deep character building at the same time.

So much better than the crap I produce.

#39 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

This gif is getting a lot of mileage, think I have read too many sadfics lately. :ajsleepy: DH, you are one of exactly two authors who manage to get me to cry on a regular basis.  I eagerly await your next work.

#40 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

This is a really good story, I'd suggest re-reading it with the Dead Island theme song playing, it really creates that type of sad mood.

#41 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Ow fuck my heart... :fluttershyouch:

#42 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

"Ha, the compass doesn't even work properly anymore, because so much residual magic from me staring at it and manipulating the indicator has messed up the magnetism. It only points at me, now, and only when I'm upset; otherwise, it just sort of spins on its own, really slowly."

There's something terribly profound about this line.  Wish I could put into words what it is.

I kept waiting for Twi to come down hard on the fundamental astronomic incorrectness of the pithy inscription, but it never quite happened.

#43 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

>>790470 That jumped at you too eh? I won't lie, the mental part of me was unable to determine it's significance, but the emotional part of me coughed blood it was hit so hard. Good line to think on, IMHO. If there was some sort of hidden meaning in that line, I'm depressed I missed it; I'd love to know what it is.

Anyhorse, great work DH. I'm glad to see you back in the swing of things. A few minor punctuation and grammar errors here and there, but I can understand that since it was a spur-of-the-moment one-shot.

Keep that stride my friend.

L&T,

Koba

#44 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

I cannot express how I feel about this story, other then the word masterpiece.

Its...deep and profound, and...it makes you think.

#45 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Damn it...

Now I'm crying, you heartless... :raritycry:

Device. You magnificent bastard I read YOUR FICS!

#46 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

I won't say that it is wonderful and emotionally affecting. Not because it isn't true, but because, well, it's a DH fic. Birds fly, grass grows and device heretic makes you weepy about cartoon ponies. Somehow. I suspect witchcraft is involved.

What I will say is that it felt real. It was sad, but not in a way that smacks of artifice[1]. The relationship between Celestia and Twilight was pleasantly understated, too. A chamber piece of a fic, really, if you'll forgive the pretentious expression.

I'd belabor the point some more, as is my wont, but I need to call my parents. Actually, what I need is to hug them, but the space-time continuum is being difficult again.

[1] Not that "Eternal" wasn't amazing, but its latter half was essentially a prolonged attempt by DH to grind our hearts into a fine snortable powder. You can see your heartstrings being manipulated, but, at the time, you don't care because you are busy re-evaluating your life, finding it wanting, and promising to be a better person for the rest of your days.

>>790470

>>790499

That jumped out at me, too. I don't know what it is, and it keeps niggling at me.  A meaningless gift rendered meaningful because of context? Imperfect and broken, as their relationship, it's still deeply personal, still points towards Twilight? Damn. I feel there's some pithy way to say it but it eludes me.

#47 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh my goodness, I'm in love with your writing. You portrayed the characters so well that I actually read the dialogue in their voices. Well done!

#48 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

We've all recieved gifts that let us down, and I'm sure most of us have lost someone shortly after a fight, I think that's just the univers being a dick.  :facehoof:

I love the little references in here, it's a good story (aren't all of yours?) :twilightsmile:

#49 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Fuck. That hit a little too close to home for my liking, so I am not sure how objective I can be right now. Still, this was a great jump back to some really solid form, device. Simple and executed very well. Nice work.

#50 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh man. Being a feeler sucks. I can't see things coming, and the hit me like a brick. Not to mention I'll never be able to put down what I felt in words. English fails me at every turn, it seems. I don't know why you wrote this, but it has meaning.

Now I'm going to go tell my parents I love them; won't they be surprised? ... They probably will be, and that's the sad part.

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