Matthew has always been called a savage and now in this new world he finds himself in he can truly be what he has been called for so long.
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The premise seems interesting and in this early phase of the story nothing more can be said on that front. On the technical side the story needs improvement. It is not impossible to read but there are quite a few spelling errors. I would recomend getting an editor, there are a number of editing groups on this site. If you would prefer to do it yourself there are some fantastic free editing softwares and sites. I reccomend Grammarly which is what I use mainly or for an online editing site http://www.polishmywriting.com is also very useful. I look forward to more of this story.
You need a lot of help with spelling and punctuation. This story was almost embarrassing to read at times.
I'd recommend getting an editor to help.