Zephyr Breeze, the brother of Kindness is anything but kind.
But can we truly understand what feelings linger under the surface?
A few letters may tell us more.
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Magenta Gleam
I write horse words and stuff.
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Very nice man. "We all wear masks and the time comes when we cannot remove them without removing some of our own skin." Well done sir.
7340082
Thank you. :3
I have a feeling Fluttershy found those letters after the guards discovery.
At first, I thought Zephyr was writing this letter. I can't see Fluttershy actually addressing a letter like that.
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Also there is this great [ strike ][ /strike ] tag, you could use it maybe.
(And I'm not sure if this requires the Tragedy tag too.)
7340437
I wrote it like that because I felt like Fluttershy wouldn't be sure how to address Twilight in a letter.
7340455
Admittedly I was tempted to use the Tragedy tag but I decided not to because while the emotions created are strong I feel that the writing isn't good enough to truly require it.
It was meant to have
striketag but it never copied over and I forgot about it.Fixing it now, thanks. :)
7340504 I had to double check the rules to make sure about that, the Tragedy and Sad tags are frequently confusing.
7340585
Sad seems to be easy but Tragedy is a little more difficult.
Inclusion of the sad tag seems to be common sense unlike Tragedy which is more structured in usage.
Quite the heartbreaker of a story and I like the letter format. But I would like to know more of the aftermath and how Fluttershy deals with her brother's death
Zephyr (after reading this thing): "WHY WOULD SOMEPONY WRITE THIS?!? WHO WOULD WRITE ABOUT SOMETHING LIKE THIS?!?" (Just trying to lighten the mood)
7340129 You welcome
This was okay, although I wish Fluttershy could read her brother's letters afterwards.
7343543 It would destroy certain parts of the sequels if she had received his letters.
Boring suicide fic that goes nowhere.
7398474
1. It never states that he killed himself.
2. It has a sequel.
3. The death isn't the focus of this fic, his viewpoint is.
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A sequel is no excuse for a story that goes nowhere. This story says "One-shot" and is tagged "Complete", so there's no way for a reader to know the story is actually incomplete without reading it. Even if you had done the reasonable thing and made this the first chapter of a longer story, it would still be a bad first chapter.
The half of the story that's from Zephyr's perspective says nothing new about him; it's all stuff we already know from the show. And if he didn't kill himself, then why does he die in the story at all? There's no apparent cause, and the only effect is that Fluttershy is implied to be sad about it.
It also annoys me that this story ignores the events of the only episode Zephyr Breeze was in. Fluttershy tried to help him get his life on track. Maybe that didn't work out, but we don't know because nobody in this story seems to remember that happening.
I enjoyed the letter structure. Could have used more development. Perhaps in the end mentioning that the letters were found would have worked. Then you would have had the contrast with Fluttershy's letters of concern and the clear cry from help coming from Zephyr with the twist that Fluttershy just never saw them.
Feels hurt.