Through the Looking-Glass
A young and studious horned pony, a magical unicorn residing in the land of Equestria, still in her wild and illustrious years of being the well-known and impressionable student of royalty renowned for kindness of all shapes and sizes, stands rigid though undetermined in front of herself of a lavender coat, a dark blue mane with a pink and purple stripe to add a kind of depth, and eyes that gaze deep into whatever they perceive, a look of worry and discomfort in her tired and practiced visage for uncovering all of the mysteries of the world, staring deep into the reflection of her doppelganger of what she is, thinking to herself of her secrecy and regret over the facts of this depressive sight before her, the truth binding this unicorn named Twilight Sparkle and her mind, sharp and never losing resolve, to all she sees in this mirror of a parallel yet identical world, the hidden, the lies, the deceit, and it pains her so, inciting stress and anxiety, unrest and obsession, all in the back of her guilt-ridden, vast and intelligent consciousness as the countless, engaging activities of everyday life occupy her excitable stay at the earth pony town of Ponyville, ever-wary of the sweat on her brow being a result of all such feelings making this heated summer afternoon even more uncomfortable for her, the sun blazing high in the clear sky as the pegasus ponies were directed, Twilight having to deal with the incredible temperature within her home of a caved-out plant, shying away within and misleading all ponies around her to ignorance, never asking of it, never noticing it, never inquiring as they cannot see what she keeps from them, a crimson unseen behind a veil of violet and synthetics, Twilight's true self of which she was born, invisible to the entire world as she sees fit, unable to face what lies within and without, obscuring the truth to avoid all of what may be, what could be, the possibilities sending her unending neuroticism into more a heavy load for her to bear, the reaction of what they would say a dangerous assumption for her mindset, ever considering the options, the flaws, the logic, the outcome being too much to deal with for the lavender unicorn as she remains motionless upon the throw rug, idling in front of her dresser atop the high level of her home within the library, the exuberant emotion pouring throughout her head, deliberating over all that she has kept from every pony that she has met, the self-condemnation she feels whenever meeting somepony new, smiling and betraying a trust as she speaks to them with a voice of friendship, the deception within her always, forever aspiring to be released of this burden, this curse of a cycle of regretful heartbreak and disloyalty, but cannot overcome what she is, the apprehension far too much for her to experience, the worry neverending, causing her strained and mindful eyes to glisten with her tears as she glares at her taunting and insidious reflection with spite, cursing at herself for being too weak, too unspirited and not resolute with determination to conquer all that she was given, cursing at her parents for making her this way even though they are not to blame, but the fault of the imprecise and misunderstood science of genetics, something she has studied years of to attempt to correct this mistake beyond her control, this accident that should never have been, a truth which Twilight cannot manage by her own will, despite proof of her exploits and all that everypony has seen of said will that creates powerful friendships to bring all ponies around her together in love and harmony, a soulful magic stronger than any other known to ponykind, keeping a balance within the world as they know it, and this unicorn denies it so, dismissing inquiries as to her condition, why she is so troubled when confronted with what she perceives as a question about the truth that she keeps hidden, forever looping her in an eternal game within her mind, opposing sides fighting for the right to act or to not act in order to better herself, consciousness and unconsciousness, logic and emotion, right and wrong, all of which proceeds to maintain her position as one that is in check, never being able to stand up for herself, even being one so prestigious amongst everypony who meets with her, intelligent and knowledgeable about all matters, stable with her actions and reactions, always providing advice to those who ask for it, and yet Twilight challenges these thoughts, determining for herself that she cannot cope with this lie, forever dooming herself to the cycle of pain and torment within her mind, a whirlpool of conflicts and fears all spiraling to a bitter end, and turns them away in the spirit of her friends that give her strength in ways beyond comprehension, ever vigilant with their personalities and beliefs, voicing their thoughts, imbuing and purifying her mind with the magic of friendship, the Elements of Harmony having chosen Twilight and her five friends for a reason, the magic within her sparkling and giving hope to all, including herself within the void of detriment and melancholy called her brain, the logical type of mindset continuing to be pushed away in lieu of the emotional connections that drive her, inspire her to do great things for herself, her wonderful friends, and the ponies all across Equestria, never ceasing to provide her wonder and surprise beyond any that the entire world could see, and this unicorn wants to quit this lie she has been so uneasy and fearful about, wanting to end this nonsense of being afraid of nothing, having trust in her friends to understand her lifelong plight, so she levitates the second piece to her eye, blocking once again the truth for everypony out there, but she knows now what she must do in order to have a true and lasting peace within her mind.
"...There," Twilight states to herself as she blinks at her reflection in the mirror. "Both of them are in." She looks away from her now purple-tinted irises with a smile, turning to hop down to her study on the lower level and starting her day.
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1Hmm... that was interesting Lamia. Twilight has contacts... that's the first I've heard.
I give you a moustache on your creativeness
and another for an interesting fic 
That... was an experience. It pulled me in, almost as if the mirror locked me into a grueling stasis, constantly thrashing myself about my mind in an...
Oh wait. Now I'm doing it too. Anyway, that was one heck of a sentence. And the end fit perfectly.
My head hurt, when I finally finished it, but it was worth it. Great job! James Joyce would be proud.
Kept me at the edge of my seat for the build-up.
:l
Dat run-on sentence lasting almost a whole paper.
hmmm dat was INTERNETING
EDIT: Wow, it really was a giant run-on sentence, I bet that was the point. People are stupid not to read it just because of the format. Liked it though.
P.S
Keep up the good work on Diary of a Ruler :3I guess you finished it, need to read the last 2 chapters.I believe that is a run-on sentence. Not sure though. Can we get some grammar experts in here to confirm?
I would've read it, but it was too wall-o-text.
There's a thing called a paragraph, have you heard of it? o.O
No I didn't read it. I don't want a headache.
the fact it was an entire paragraph made me just skip to the comment section to tell you its a paragraph...not interesting to read a paragraph...hats off to you for the idea though that was pretty creative. maybe seperate the suff a bit and it would be perfect.
781550
IT'S CALLED CAPITALIZATION!!
You know, I was afraid to read this at first, and I put it off for a day, but when I actually did get around to reading it, I found myself not having any problems doing so at all. It was interesting and it kept mine, for sure.
And that ending was out of left field for me. I like it.
I... I don't understand...
Damn. Worlds longest sentence.
This is why I love fan fiction. Nopony would ever take this seriously as a regular short, but we can be experimental here and write a thousand-word sentence.
781568
not quite, but studying them unlocked the secret to making them without them being a run-on
which technically this fic's sentence is not, afaik
i tried to read this, i really did, but the wall-o text got to me.. couldn't finish it.
Please use paragraphs, and i'll gladly read it.
781580
you can't indent in the middle of a sentence
That was interesting, though not necessarily an easy read - I'm aware of your stylistic intent, but it's kind of a costly trade off.
Works for a one shot I guess.
781579
I just checked. the worlds longest sentence is 1,288 words (guinness book of records) officially. However, unofficially, the longest sentence is 469,856 words.
I implore you, cease and desist from corresponding your interpretations in comparably aboundingly verbose and superfluous, which is to say unwanted, exorbitant and redundant, affectation, which is to say peculiarity, idiosyncrasy, demeanor or mannerism.
Need breath.....that's what periods are for!
Grammatically correct and nifty. I like experimentalism, particularly when used effectively to paint a mood or image, as was done here.
Congrats, you're the first person I've ever seen to pull off a thousand word sentence. Ever.
Damn.....I love this and was laughing hard at the ending and you are a bucking genius with having so much words of....I guess I could say speech but I'm a very bad speller so I don't know how to say the real word, I liked it, even though I know that it could have had a period and seprate words.....yeah.
This falls slightly short of the 1288-word sentence in Faulkner's Absalom, Absalom! that Guinness once cited as the longest in the language, to say nothing of James Joyce. On the other hoof, none of us are quite Faulkner or Joyce, and I don't think I want either of them trying to write about Twilight Sparkle.
Well done.
its good, I hate reading a wall of text but I liked it
Your choice of style is interesting, but it also made it rather difficult to understand... Though I tried to just start at the beginning and read it through, I found myself skimming over it and picking out the phrases that seemed important, something I usually avoid doing.
If you scroll though it at the right speed, the words ripple. It's really trippy.
I don't care if they're not proper paragraphs, BUT PLEASE BREAK IT UP! Make it two sentences and break those up.
A story of slight imperfection becoming a psychological trip. Well done.
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...COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL!
So she hides the color of her eyes? Is that what I'm getting? Odd, but if that's what she wants.
That must be the longest sentence I have ever read...and it surprisingly flowed very well. Kudos on this.
I tried to read this. Honestly, I did. As is, however, I'm just going to give it an uprating in passing, put an ice pack over my eyes, and never look at this again.
781744 so much text for...... two contacts.
782081 ....You make a valid point dear sir, even though I have no idea what it is
No wait...I got the joke now Hahahahahahahaahah...nice one....*facehoof*
Stream of consciousness and paranoid delusions come to mind while reading this. I do suppose that was the plan and if so good job. All the same though, the overly flowery language along with the giant wall of text sentence is filled with a bit of redundancy I think.
781622
Good grief. It's that Mojo Jojo language episode all over again.
I feel ashamed that I gave up reading the first sentence about a few lines down and skipped to the second sentence.
I get the impression that you wrote the first sentence fairly artistically.
My eyes don't feel good when reading walls of text. Sorry.
I gotta agree, the whole wall of text thing doesn't help. There's a reason spacing out paragraphs is standard writing practice - it's just easier to follow.
782280 that was a joke, son, I was poking fun at the fic.
So when she was a filly her parents made her wear contacts?
*puts on "Watch Later*
Please spread this out into paragraphs so it doesnt hurt my eyes to read. I'm deadly serious, it strains my eyes badly, and I'm actually forbidden at the moment from eye strain.
I'm not sure, but are her eyes two different colors and it bugs her? And that's what she's hiding? It was a bit confusing.
782482 Yeah, the picture seems to imply she has hetero-chromatic eyes, although she does say "they're both in". But Twilight doesn't seem like she'd be one to fret over having like brown eyes.
782471
like I said above, you can't indent in the middle of a sentence
782482 782600
this is the difference between showing and telling.
spoiler: she has red eyes, both of them obviously, the story starts with her having one in
Twilight wears contacts/changes her eye color to please her OCD?
I like this. 
Nice idea, well executed. Don't ever make me read something like this again.
I'll look at the horizon and clouds now, just to relax my eyes.
783029 Wow and she worries about her friends finding out about THAT, well I guess I can't argue with her on that.
My head hurts... the biggest run-on sentence I have ever seen...
785992
it's not a run-on sentence