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NJH12


Hi i'm NJH12 and I have a accont on Deviantart it is also NJH12. And I seriously need an editor.

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A massive battle with Tirek's mom the main 6 was over but without of 5 elements out of 6 broken and Princess Celestia said that there were only 7 places each can reforge into newer ones but they may have to go to extreme places to do it.
the Magic element broken so bad that each half of the gem had to be reforged in two places 1 was on the dark side of the moon the other was in the sun's core. The Kindness element was lucky it was the one that did not break. The others had cracks in them so they only to be reforged in one location. Honesty was in changeling kingdom in the center of Queen Chrysalis' castle, Loyatity was in an active volcano near the griffon regen, Generosity was in diamond dog city, Laughter was in a dead-pan country where laughter was a crime.

other characters:
Queen Chrysalis
Griffons
Princess Celestia
mules
Tirek's mom
cranky doodle donkey
Gilda

New = Old
1)bravery = Laughter
2)justice = Honesty
3)intergrity = magic
4)kindness
5)preseverance = magic
6)patience = generosty
7)determination = loyalty

Note: there should be 11 chapters mimum. Chapters 2-8 happen about the same time give or take. Also this only borrows Undertail's 7 types of hearts as elements. xKyly is my own character

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 6 )

Grammatical nightmare. Unreadable mess. Typos, typos, typos.

Clean it up and think it through again.

It could be longer like 200 more words will make this better in general
Not overall great story😊

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