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7265582 it should be borderline and the fic is tagged mature...you can see butt from the front...but not her gentiles...if they have an issue with it i'll crop it out.

EDIT: changed it anyway, think this image is cuter and better anyway might use it for a pic prompt for bubble berry's chapter.

Where is the Source for the Cover art and what was the previous cover art?

7267262 I just googled spike rule 63...the original fic was barb naked from the front on a bed with her butt the most visible but it was borderline nsfw

This seems interesting but it really needs gone over for formatting errors. There are quite a lot of quotation errors and other grammar issues that make it very hard to read and nearly impossible to be immersed in. Definitely worth watching though.

7267950 thanx, i do mostly my own editing and try to keep the formatting tight but when you haven't cracked a book on writing in so long it gets to you

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Yeah, I think this would be significantly more readable if you just went through it right quick and made sure all the dialogue had properly closed off quotation, make sure you start a new paragraph if you have a new speaker (I only noticed this toward the beginning), make sure to cap your proper nouns, and go over it just one more time to make sure you used the right word.

Picking a paragraph at random I spotted two in the same sentence, but it was fairly prevalent throughout:

The little stallion could only gasp and muffle his cried as the dragoness bared down in him like an amours train.

The first should of course be cries and, depending on what you were going for, the second should be either armoured or amorous. I think armoured fits the metaphor better, but if anything could be an amorous train it would probably be a dragon. You could also probably make a joke about Love Train by The O'Jays

Sorry I wasn't actually helpful in my first post. I was just trying to get through a backlog of fics and I felt like commenting but not actually collating any real suggestions, which was kind of shitty of me.

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I know you did that on purpose (I hope.)

If you didn't, erogenous.

hem f his boxers

You're missing an "o"

Drcaoniquis

What? Even I see there is something wrong.

Ah, yes. The over-the-shoulder-boulder-holder. Also known as the Breast Restraining Apparatus, or BRA

Seriously? Noone's gonna ask about the Dremora in the shed?
Interesting take btw.

Using bubbles to catch dragonflies well there's our Spyro enter the dragonfly reference