Brick

by dash446

I love tree?

2 Hours later

Brick and the six other mares which he learned there respective names, Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, Rarity, and Fluttershy. Brick is currently talking to Pinkie Pie about a bird and the time when he discovered the 'Cinnamon Floffel' which made Pinkie, Fluttershy, and Rarity nauseous.

Rarity walked up to the pail brown pegasus in front of her and asked "Why were you eating out of the trash can, Darling? that is going to make you sick."

Brick responded with an unbelieving tone of voice "Nooo, That was not a garbage can it was the special can at he end of the lunch line, Called a food can. Do you want a 'Cinnamon Floffel'?" at that question Rarity scrunched up her face and shook her head.

"I'm ok, thank you, Darling." She told him off politely, but Brick on the otherhoof saddened, but to only pip up once more.

Brick then looked up to the leafy cannipy above and asked "Why, leaves getting thinner?'" he asked.

Twilight answered his question "Well, because we are getting closer to Ponyville." after answering his question she looked around to see him nowhere. he suddenly poped out from a shrub eating something brown. The brown thing that brick is eating is a leaf with something gooy seeping out of it.

Twilight turned to Brick and asked "Uhhhhh......Brick, What are you eating?" Then when Twilight got a closer look at it, it is some liquefied poisonous mushroom goo wrapped in a blue poisonjoke leaf, that he is eating "Brick stop!" She yells in worry and quickly wraps the the thing in her magic and ripped it from his grip.

Brick reached his wings out and yells " I want my taco!" Then when he tried to get it off twilight she just pushed him away.

Twilight turned to Brick and said in pure panic " Brick, do you have any idea what you just ate?"

"A TACO! My belly feels weird." Brick answered and then vomited all over Rarity. As that happened to her, she let out a very ladylike scream then canted with the toxic vomit running down her beautiful white coat.

Brick turned to Twilight stumbling while doing so "I LOVE TREE?" The rest of five mares look to him with looks of confusion on there faces and then brick collapsed on the ground.

TOO BE CONTUNUED

Comments

[Kibosh]

Some minor errors but, and I'm not ashamed to admit it, I laughed my ass off.

[dash446]

7587023 thanks!

*brick pokes dash446 in back*

Dash446: "Yes, Brick?"

*Brick shoves ' cinnamon falafel' in dash446's face.*

Pony Brick: "Falafel!!!"

[dash446]

7587023 also, do you know any appropriate groups I can put this story in?

[Dustchu]

Mmm...

...

Honestly, I'm not sure what to say, I guess its supposed to be comedy, but I didn't really... laugh. I guess? It seems forced, and far too silly. Most of what this Brick guy is saying is weird, if he honestly that idiotic?

Ehh... have a thumbs up for effort, but its not my cup of tea.
Sorry Dash446

[dash446]

7587321 well he is from the movie Anchorman. He's the mentally retarded weatherman that Steve Carell played in Anchorman.

Thanks anyways. There is going an update on it will something I can call mine soon. I am half way done with the next chaptor of that soon be shire to look for it.

[Dustchu]

7587377
Maybe if I had seen the movie I might have gotten the reference, but I haven't sorry buddy.
Well, keep up the good work regardless, I might check it out later on.

[Mix-up]

I think this could be a funny story but I feel that you rush the writing way too much, as I don't know a thing about who Brick is what sort of person he is and so forth. I hope you will keep on improving in your writing.

[dash446]

7663364 as in the part about brick, he is from the movie Anchorman Steve Carell please him. He is mentally retarded weatherman.
Brick

[dash446]

7663453 thanks I will be shire to inprove
7587398 dustchu here's who Brick is

[dash446]

7587398 this is just in case if I made a mistake on the comments -dustchu here's who Brick is

[Mix-up]

7663453 I mean I don't get much about him in the story itself, there isn't any information of how he is and how are the six mares how are trying to help him.

[dash446]

7663708 I will fix this. I was just in a rush writing it.

[Dustchu]

7663467
Oooohohoho, lol, I get it now. Nice.

7663708
Your avatar is 666 different kinds of awesome right now, hehe

[dash446]

7663906 now that is a wrap up of brick.

[Dustchu]

7663910
Nice

[dash446]

7663911 now that you saw that clip are you going to watch the movie?

[Dustchu]

7663917
Eh, maybe if I can get my hands on it.