Greenblood is bloody lex luthor... Welp, should of killed him when you had the chance celestia.

I really liked this story up till here, but Luna going dull Pants on Head murdering NMM so quick was just too much. *Downvotes and walks away*

Oh my god they killed celestia.... you bast&$ds... YOU BAST&$DS!!!!

I thought I'd give it one more chapter to see if the writing improved. Here's what I found and thought PS SPOILERS

First Order - Star Wars, but you might as well have called them Nazi's and have them shout "Heil" every time they would have had dialogue, it would've been less obvious

Luna heel turn - extremely forced (and also very star wars)

Luna killing Celestia - would never happen, Luna isn't an idiot, Neither is Celestia, Celestia can teleport.

Luna going dictator - She just killed Celestia for that (very "Anakin Skywalker vs Mace Windu" of her)

Luna condoning the murder of innocents - yeah, no.

Luna ordering the killing of Rainbow Dash (Bearer of element of harmony) when she spared Twilight as she is an element of Harmony - I FOUND A PLOT HOLE (again), NURSE!

The first order sparing Twilight without specific orders to do so ahead of time - judging from how trigger happy they are, this wouldn't happen (we call this plot armour) Also Twilight's research is to CURE not KILL the dragons

First order doing appreciable damage to a creature (assuming ponies are 5ft tall) a hundred times their size - nope

Ponies having star trek disruptor type weaponry and Space Marine Power armour ahead of gunpowder, lasers, and super magic guns - HA!

This stopgap concocted by Twilight - smells like it was pulled out of arse to prevent propagation and lead to everyone being so called "super dragons" resolving the entire plot before it goes nowhere judging from the plot summary in the description

Convenient Pony Resistance - Is very convenient

All in all, well I don't think I need to say anything do I? I assume you've been watching Star Wars and playing Wolfenstein a lot. I suggest you read this story again VERY carefully and ask "where is my idea?"

Also you have a therapist? is that supposed to impress me?

This story was made to piss off everyone wasn't it? Luna is a bitch, killed Celestia, possibly rainbow dash twice, pinkie pie is no fun, fluttershy shy can bitch slap, zecora doesn't rhyme, and skipped what would have been a glorious sex scene.

anymore?

I like a bit of sudden crazy illogical killing between the princesses more than most, but that was just kinda dumb.
Can Celestia not teleport or shield herself? Is she unwilling to? Why does Luna think killing her sister is a good idea, and why would she take it as the first option for a crisis, with how much she loves Celestia?
The troopers follow orders to the letter...except for killing some reporter. They aren't even trying to really hide what's going on, so why bother? It's a waste of energy.
Why kill Rainbow, but let Twi live? Twi's usefulness as a bearer only works if Rainbow is returned to normal or can use her element while transformed.
The whole thing is rushed and nonsensical. Luna and Greenblood are staging a coup with the excuse that it's to stop Celestia's coup, but it's clear that the manner they're doing it won't be bought by the senate. Even before that, the bits with Celestia being able to override the senate at any point, and override Luna, and in general the whole process seeming to be pointless escalation of overrides makes no sense. Why is the senate even there? It works better if it's just Celestia taking power from Luna away.

As for the incredibly lazy use of villain ideas from a recent movie, it doesn't serve the story at all.

Oh, and why is disintegration mixed in with vore, decapitation, and gore? What's the point? Disruptors that disintegrate are even a Star Trek thing, not Star Wars. Shouldn't it be blasters that leave burn marks?

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No. It's fair criticism. This was my first story. It was poorly though out and overly ambitious. I considering deleting it, but a few people seemed to like it, so I left it up. I have been planning a psudo-remake, but I've been busy.

Thank you for the critique.

7857942 i came in expecting freaky ass sexual content, but thought it'd be interesting since bored. thank you for putting some story into it and i honestly thought such a sad AND horny tale was pretty good XD . wish it was a bit more logical though... i mean ONE outburst that got a small number killed, and they burn equestria in a spontaneous slaughter fest. ( the story WORKS. doesn't mean its perfect on all fronts. but it was good enough for me to want improved MOAR x3

Same here, I felt like this had potential but failed. However that didn't stop you from doing other Macro Zecora stories and other characters.
I'd say maybe to give this a reboot/remake and say, drop the futa stuff and exchange it to where say an anthro Zecora wishes to preserve nature like in Massive in Manehatten except she grows to a seductive giantess and rampages through cities in Equestria in what ever ways she wishes.