Rainbow Dash is a cocky, egotistical, boastful Pegasus on the outside, but what happens when it's just her all by her lonesome? For the past ten years she has had to deal with the death of her parents. What happens when Mother's Day comes around but she has nopony to celebrate it with? Nopony to say Happy Mother's Day to?
The feels
That is an amazing fanfic!
Thanks! To be honest I feel like it was rushed a bit but I'm glad you liked it!
I'm all but certain that Rainbow's Dad is still alive, but my belief is that she may have lost her mom when she was young. That could explain her insecurities. And being raised by her Dad probably explains the other big parts of her personality :-)
7268443 Probably. I just thought it'd be a good way to start the story with both her parents being dead. Plus it's my first story so it ain't really my best work. Ah well, only time can help me improve!
So sad and amazing!
7269205 glad you enjoyed it!
7268509 I was curious, have you seen all the show episodes up to this point?
7270966 not all of them. I still have yet to see Wendigo wasteland and any of the new episodes past newbie dash
7271028 Ok, I was gonna ask a couple questions, but it'll have to wait till you're caught up.
7271034 that may take a while. I have no way to watch the new episodes. My family don't know I'm a brony so I can't watch any of them. Plus my internet is terrible where I'm at. Plus no matter where I look I cannot find Wendigo wasteland anywhere! It's starting to bug me
7271125 Windigo Wasteland? There's no episode by that name. Maybe you're using alternate titles that blind reactors use?
7273666 oh. I dunno the real name of it then. It's the one where the Mane 6 get frozen by these flying ghost horses or something and then Twilight gets a sudden surge of magic and breaks out of the ice.
7274033 That's a season 2 episode, Hearth's Warming Eve. I'll send you a PM in a bit.
7274725 alright. Thanks!
I know I'm just being a jerk.
But I think that phrase (in bold) could use a little rewording.
The fact that this is all rammed together takes a little from the story (for me), but not too much. Needs to be spread out a little, but it's still good.
Fully is Filly. But still a nice quote.
And here's where water somehow got in my eyes...
Nice going overall. Only a few small errors, but nothing I'm not struggling with in my own writings.
Great work! This goes into "Other Goodies".
7316574 I'm glad you enjoyed it. As far as the errors go, the part that you felt was all crammed together I'm not really sure how I could fix it. Putting it into paragraphs doesn't sound right to me. And the part where she talks about Scootaloo, I don't know how the hell I didn't catch that.
And any tips on how I can reword the bold part would be appreciated.
Thanks!
7316664
May I humbly suggest something like this.
instead of:
Maybe something like this?
Or this?
And as far as making the quotes separate paragraphs, I think you might be able to do so like this:
But, that's just my being nitpicky. It's fine how it is, I was just taught to notice these things, sir.
I just tend to be a bit of a Grammar Nazi.
Just a couple humble suggestions. I'm still working through minor issues like this myself!
7316704 I will make adjustments accordingly. Thanks!! And would you mind reading the story I just submitted today and let me know what I could do to make it better?
7316732
It would be my honor to look at it when it comes out, thank you for valuing my opinions.
7316742 I will send you a link
7316774
Thank you for the link. But Alas, I'm afraid I cannot review mature content. My apologies.
7316788 do you know how to enable it?
7316801
Yes, but I am somewhat... under the age limit.
So... I prefer to keep it off. Would you mind informing me what it is rated M for? If it is for gore, I'll be able take a quick look at it. But if it's for sexual content, I'm afraid I'll have to decline.
7316819 it's mostly for gore. As far as sexual content it doesn't go any farther than a few sexual comments. Nothing sexual really happens
7316863
I'll be able to check it out, then.
7316865 YAY!
7398076 yes I do dare! MUWAHAHAHAHA!!!
7432108 yessss
That's sad. :(
7575269 Mission accomplished