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  • E Hiatus

    Redeemed, Luna finds she must spend a year in order to recover. But how will she pass the time?
    36,710 words · 23,779 views  ·  1,139  ·  28
  • E Stuck In The Middle With You

    Luna opens a summer camp, but the campers who sign up certainly aren't who she expects.
    36,913 words · 8,339 views  ·  583  ·  17
  • T Unintended

    Applejack and Twilight discover that there's more to each other than what meets the eye.
    79,130 words · 7,235 views  ·  628  ·  21
  • T What Must Be Done

    Curiosity leads to a recruit asking and learning about the tragic history of the Night Guard.
    5,667 words · 5,241 views  ·  371  ·  11
  • T Triage

    The daily life of a simple nurse.
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  • E A Midnight Stroll

    A bored Luna makes a brief visit to Ponyville, making friends and learning about herself.
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  • T No Light

    A simple mistake leads to a guard learning much more than he ever wanted.
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  • T Little White Lie

    So long as you're helping others, what's the harm in telling a lie?
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  • 14w, 6d
    What Could Have Been

    Noctis?

    ...hm?

    Do you ever dream?

    But of course. 'tis a rather silly question to be asking of me, is it not?

    Well, you never know. Some do and some don't.

    You have a question related to the first, do you not?

    Eh, just curiosity, mostly. What kinds of things do you dream of?

    Being lorekeeper for the Vigil has exposed me to a wealth of knowledge. Such things have opened me to the infinite possibilities presented to one during each and every lifetime. I dream of what is, and what could have been, of threads of fate that shall never be realized -- the wheel from which they were spun has ceased to turn. I dream of what life may have been like had we embarked on some grand adventure, the likes of which had never been done before. Just you and I, traveling to places unvisited for centuries, as we raced against time to stop a traitor and monsters, and to save Lady Luna and her kingdom.

    That's... wow. More entertaining than my dreams, at least.

    What of yours then, Ferous?

    No real adventure like yours. Just peace and quiet. Lots of happy moments.

    Such as?

    Falling in love, buying a home, raising a family.

    Happy moments indeed. And who would such moments be shared with, hm?

    ...I think you know.

    Ah, but I do. And I shan't tell a soul.

    10 comments · 210 views
  • 26w, 1d
    Attending Trotcon

    I'm breaking the silence (and my self-imposed exile) to announce that I will be at Trotcon in Columbus, Ohio, between June 20th and June 22nd. This is mostly so I can see friends again and to spend time with them, and not necessarily because of the pony fandom. Sorry.

    I'll either be attending as a helper, as I have several friends vending, or as a panelist. That's still up in the air.

    2 comments · 142 views
  • 56w, 4d
    Fin

    As of today, I have decided to cease any and all work on any of my pony fics. Questions answered below:

    Why?

    -----

    Several reasons. I'm back in nursing school, struggling to figure out what I want to do with my life, I'm on the verge of moving (which is just next week), and there's a few other things. The biggest one, however, is this fandom and this site. This fandom is filled with some of the most ungrateful, misogynistic, and self-centered people I have ever encountered, and the fact that it continues (and will do so for quite a while) is equal parts sickening and depressing. Moreso, writing for the pony fandom is no longer enjoyable -- I can work on something, post it here, and it is instead drowned out by a plethora of poorly-written ship fics and crossovers, none of which have even the slightest bit of originality to them. The userbase on this site is immensely frustrating, tends to have very poor tastes in literature, and few of them have any understanding of storytelling mechanics. Unless something is explicitly explained to them, they simply won't get it, and having to explain myself repeatedly is aggravating.

    You don't really mean that, do you?

    -----

    I do. Every word of it. Don't get me wrong, I've made some amazing friends through the pony fandom, but by and large, it's filled with individuals I want nothing to do with. I'm done contributing when I'm not getting any satisfaction out of it. I'll still watch the show, still moderate the chatroom, and I'll still attend conventions (mostly because friends are vending and I'm there to support them), but no more writing. I have neither the time nor the energy for it.

    But I really liked your stories! Will you ever finish some of them?

    -----

    Maybe. Maybe not. That's for me to decide, and constantly harassing and begging me to come back will very likely do the opposite. Please respect my decision.

    Where will you be at?

    -----

    Around. I still mod the chatroom, and all my contact info is still in my bio.

    None of my fics will be deleted, including those that are incomplete.

    So long, and thanks for all the fish.

    -Vargras

    38 comments · 738 views
  • 59w, 5d
    Oh

    14 comments · 381 views
  • 62w, 3d
    Back

    I've actually been back from Bronycon, but I haven't been on the site much, mostly because my Ponyfiction Vault interview went up and all the comments were about the state I was from and not the actual story itself. SLIGHTLY DISAPPOINTED THERE, FIMFIC.

    Also hi new watchers, I'll do more stuff eventually.

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With Granny Smith's health in a slow decline, and Sweet Apple Acre sales also suffering, Applejack becomes despondent. Rumors of a mystical tree of life, bearing magic fruit, rekindle a flame within her, and she tackles the issue the only way she knows how - head-on.

Sequel to 'Forbidden Fruit': 'Unintended' (Shipping/Slice of Life)

Fic is rated Teen for brief alcohol use, mild language, and discussions of death.

Featured on Equestria Daily! Thanks to everyone who has read, reviewed, and commented!

First Published
25th Nov 2011
Last Modified
23rd Dec 2011
#1 · 151w, 5d ago · 1 · · Hard Times ·

For all future readers, reviewers, and comments: This fic is rated Teen SOLELY because of (very brief) alcohol use and discussions of death. I likely could have passed this as rated for Everyone, but I figured it would be best to play it safe.

Also, Big Mac is best big brother. :eeyup:

#2 · 151w, 3d ago · · · Whispers on the Wind ·

I swear, 'Whispers on the Wind' is the most dialogue-heavy chapter I have ever written. Should get easier to write from here, though, since they'll actually be DOING things.

#3 · 151w, 3d ago · · · Whispers on the Wind ·

interesting turn of events... but its gonna get harder before it gets easier... i eagerly await for more...

#4 · 151w, 3d ago · · · Whispers on the Wind ·

Great update to such an emotional storyline. I do wonder who else will assist Applejack and Twilight on this quest of theirs ? :ajsmug:

It was great to see BIg Mac trying to talk some reasoning into AJ as she all kinds of stubborn for a pony. :eeyup:

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one. :twilightsmile:

#5 · 151w, 3d ago · · · Whispers on the Wind ·

>>42035

Unfortunately, I have it planned out to where it will be just Applejack and Twilight. They're extremely close friends, however, moreso than some of the others in the Mane 6. It only made sense to pair them up.

#6 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Over the River... ·

Inspiration comes from the oddest of places. One of the scenes in 'Over the River' was from an idea that popped up in my head earlier this morning. It's been raining all day, and as I was driving to class, it simply... popped up. I'll let you all figure out which one it is. Very pleased with how this one turned out.

#7 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Over the River... ·

Wow this chapter just blew me out of the water... i seriously didn't expect that... But i loved it!

Keep it up!:twilightsmile:

#8 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Over the River... ·

>>43618

"blew me out of the water" - No pun intended? :twilightsheepish:

#9 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Over the River... ·

And apologies for AJ's very brief potty-mouth, but I simply had to include that given the situation. I think she can be forgiven for that.

#10 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Over the River... ·

Nice update and a great explaination on where are the other Mane 4 ponies doing in this storyline. Although, I can see Pinkie Pie causing problems at the end, when they get back to Ponyville. Given her unpredictable behavior. :pinkiehappy:

Still it was a nice update and a great balance with Twilight and Applejack teaming up in this storyline, with Applejack's strength and determination and Twilight's brains and magic, those apples are as good as found. :ajsmug:

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one. :twilightsmile:

#11 · 151w, 1d ago · · · Whispers on the Wind ·

Very nice chapter. The character interactions were spot-on, and the plot moved along nicely. Great ending line, to boot. :ajsmug:

Always a fan of AJ. She never gets enough attention.

#12 · 151w, 22h ago · · · Over the River... ·

Oh no, reading the other comments, I realised it is my time to come with (what is ment to be constructive) critizism.

The main story is ok, even really good at times, but the introduction of their quest for the healing fruit was a rather rushed turn of events. And it is never good when one of the main "pillars" of a story is shaking.

The characters are sometimes good, sometimes not as good.

A lot of the conversations seem odd, and you never manage to complete Applejack's character, she seems hollow.

But critics aside, some parts are really good, and you have one of the better Big Mac characters I have read, he is really well written in some places.

As I said, the core of the story seems ok, might even be great if you work on it.

And lastly I would say that even though I have (half) slaugthered your fic, there is still so much you can do! You wrote Hiatus, one of the best fics on this site, and i know you can make characterisations better than some authors when you truly "find" the character.

#13 · 151w, 22h ago · · · Over the River... ·

>>44924

Forgot to say that the cellar part, in the start of chapter two ( the best chapter so far ) is probably one of the best in this fic.

#14 · 151w, 22h ago · · · Over the River... ·

>>44924

Haha, don't worry about it. I appreciate the criticism and comments. It's what helps me improve things!

I have noticed that I seem to do better with characters that don't have as much behind them (like Luna, or Big Macintosh in this case). Might go back and revise the second chapter to drag things out a bit more. I'll do my best to improve things, though.

#15 · 151w, 8h ago · · · Over the River... ·

>>44924

Think I may have found my issue. I was trying to stick too closely to Applejack's character from the show and I wasn't really attempting to expand on it at all. Pretty sure I've fixed that.

Most of the flaws that was there earlier is gone now!

Character interaction is good, you finally got a firm grip on Applejack.

The adventure element is strong here, but the part about the magical "insta-kill" fruit bothers me, prehapse "Twilight" would like to share more with us in the future.

But overall, congratulations in making a great chapter out of my leat favourite pf the Mane 6 .

>>45999

I have something planned for the 'magical insta-kill fruit', don't worry about that.

And before anyone else asks, no - there will not be zombie ponies. Just wait and see where things are headed. :ajsmug:

man... no zombie's... oh well i'll keep reading anyway :twilightsheepish:

Added an 'excerpt' from 'Supernaturals' to the 'Whispers on the Wind' chapter. The tree in the picture is heavily based upon the Tree of Gondor design, and I had to make up the language myself (it's just stylized English so that it resembles the text in the Sisterhooves Social poster).

Sorry, couldn't help it. I love me some Lord of the Rings.

the only thing i have a problem with in this story is the fact that some of their actions aren't adequately explained, (applejack being this cross with twilight over a casual remark doesn't make a lot of sense unless you provide insight to the reader as to the why)

anyhow, keep up the great writing :twilightsmile:

>>47363

I'll be providing insight into that in a future chapter. There's a specific reason as to why Applejack doesn't like talking about her parents, and we'll get to that in due time.

#22 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Dirge in the Dark ·

great read, keep it up :twilightsmile:

#23 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Dirge in the Dark ·

>>48517

Thanks! One of these days, 'Forbidden Fruit' will be featured, then hopefully it'll start racking up some more views (Hiatus hasn't been updated in a while and still pulls in roughly six-times the number of views per day that Forbidden Fruit does).

One of these days.

#24 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Dirge in the Dark ·

Made a quick edit to "Dirge in the Dark" based upon feedback.

#25 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Dirge in the Dark ·

Well, I'll have a new chapter up tomorrow afternoon. This has a scene I've pictured in my head for a very long time, and once I began writing, it all sorta fell into place.

Hope you all enjoy it as much as I did while writing it.

#26 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

Wow, i'm very impressed... i really like where this is going :D keep it up!

#27 · 150w, 4d ago · 1 · · Old Wounds ·

>>49497

Friendshipping is best shipping! :twilightsmile:

I really enjoyed writing this chapter out. Once I got things going, it all began to come together - sorta like a really awesome game of Tetris, where you get a bunch of the line blocks.

#28 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

Shame not a lot of people just do friendshipping.

The ending was very sweet.

First Applejack feels akward with going into the same sleeping back with twilight but ends up asking to hug her all night :D

#29 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

>>49578

Yep! This is a scene I've had in my head for a very long time, and I'm glad it worked out as well as it did.

#30 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

>>Vargras I just couldn't help but smile while I read it. Can't help but smile if I think about it either :twilightsheepish:

#31 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

>>49588

Mission accomplished.

Cave Johnson, we're done here.

#32 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

Read this chapter alone for the fourth time. Still like the end of it a lot :twilightsheepish: When will you update again?

#33 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

>>49885

Most likely on Monday.

#34 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

There's alot of potential for non-friend-shippin' and you arent taking the easy road and doin' that , kudos.

#35 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

>>50067

Appreciate it.

#36 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

>>50089

Don't mention it, this story is perfect and should be appreciated more.

#37 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

so far.. i like the story a great deal, however there are some things that just kill my immersion... :pinkiesad2:

like them talking about possibly having to hunt: i know it's probably for dramatic effect but it is >ALWAYS< easier to find herbivore food than it is finding (and successfully hunting) animals for meat

oh well it's still a great story, keep it up :twilightsmile:

#38 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

>>50198

I'm aware of that. It's still a last-resort thing, and they might not even have to do it. They've still got leftover supplies.

Essentially, I got to discussing it with a friend in an IRC channel, and we both knew it was something rarely ever mentioned within fics (outside of maybe gorefics). I wanted to write out how the two of them would react over such a controversial topic (and indeed, neither of them are looking forward to the idea of such a thing). It was mostly just experimental and spur-of-the-moment.

Apologies if it ruined the story for you in the slightest.

#39 · 150w, 2d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

I got a bit worried that it would be Apple-Twi, until I read the comments about friendshipping.  Thank Celestia!  This is gold here!

#40 · 150w, 2d ago · · · Old Wounds ·

>>51725

Nope! I've never really been one for shipping, but I've always greatly enjoyed friendshipping, and it's definitely something that few people do.

They're close friends in this story, nothing more.

#41 · 150w, 1d ago · · · To Prove One's Worth ·

Well done. I'm wondering what this new entity brings to the table. :pinkiegasp: I also like how the initial trial was setup -- obviously for earth ponies, but also allowing others (i.e. Twilight) to assist. The action itself was well-paced, and the dialog remains spot-on. Keep it up! :ajsmug:

#42 · 150w, 1d ago · · · To Prove One's Worth ·

Great work! can't wait to see who the pony in the shadows turns out to be...

#43 · 150w, 1d ago · 1 · · To Prove One's Worth ·

>>53532

Who said it was a pony? :trollestia:

#44 · 150w, 1d ago · · · To Prove One's Worth ·

worthy..... of what i wonder... :unsuresweetie:

#45 · 150w, 1d ago · · · To Prove One's Worth ·

>>54026

Dun dun dunnnnn.

#46 · 150w, 1d ago · · · Brains and Brawn ·

New chapter is up. I DRAW THE BEST FEATHERS EVER.

#47 · 150w, 1d ago · · · Brains and Brawn ·

I couldn't see the feathers... but i imagine there pretty good...

I love how you give Apple jack moral boost by having her figure out the last test... But it thought you could have fleshed a few more feelings from Twilight's "looked like near-death-experience".

I'm really liking this story, please keep it up!

#48 · 150w, 1d ago · · · Brains and Brawn ·

>>54214

I did have that section a bit more fleshed-out at first, but the more I read it, the more it just seemed to ruin the flow. I ended up removing it and leaving it in its present state as a result.

#49 · 150w, 1d ago · · · Brains and Brawn ·

right then.

you brought this on yourself!

i want, neigh i DEMAND a picture from you in the next chapter! the subject ? twilight with wings! :twilightblush:

liking the latest two chapters a lot well thought out and i can envision most anything that happens in them which wasn't the case with the previous ones, keep it up :twilightsmile:

#50 · 150w, 1d ago · · · Brains and Brawn ·

>>54249

"i want, neigh i DEMAND a picture from you in the next chapter! the subject ? twilight with wings!"

fuuuuuuuu

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