Rainbow Dash has a crush on Twilight now for a while now. After a kiss in a game everything changes. Does Twilight likes Rainbow?
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PTS1503
Hello readers and writers! I like to write my own stories and read awesome and interesting fanfics. Also i sometimes read sad fanfics and i just dont know why.
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For your first Fanfic not bad, a little bit of a rush i think but that´s maybe just me.
I hope i can read maybe someday more from you so keep your head up and have fun at writing,
For your first fic it wasn't bad, but I'd suggest you take your time with writing your chapters. You want to make sure you write as much detail as necessary, but don't put too little or too much.
I'm sure with time you'll be a great writer, just make sure you have fun writing it.
Congrats on your first fanfic! It was a cute idea, although it could improve a lot with an editor. Here's a group if you're interested: Looking for Editors
Welp, here I thought I was a bad speller. The site does have spell check so you could use that before you post your story for the whole world to see. Plus sometimes it doesn't hurt to say, Rainbow said, with Twilight staying quiet.
Well, this story has a good concept just poorly executed. This story has a lot of misspelled words and grammar mistakes, also details are important to have in a story, you can't have too little or too much. I would also recommend an editor which would greatly improve your work.
Good concept, but Yeh.. I was literally reading it just wanting to edit it for you to fix alot of things >.<
I don't know but isn't the story progressing a little bit fast?
Also, lots of spelling mistakes.
Good so far!
7209920 7210891 7211204 I know. For a first fanfic, it's not bad though it has a lot of mistakes.
If you need an editor, I'm up for grabs. 
I liked the concept, however, I feel the story could have done a lot better if it had been given more TLC during the editing phase. There are just too many mistakes in every grammatical category from typos and incorrect use of verb forms to incorrect use of articles. I don't want to sound too critical, however, this number of mistakes really threatens the coherence of the story.
Of course, it should be remembered that this is your first story. With time, I am sure you will become a great author! It just takes that extra amount of TLC.
Very nice fan fic but you need an editor, if you wanted i would be happy to help you
So many grammatical errors. Otherwise, cute story m8
7294505 thanks!
7217142 thanks for the offer
Other than the spelling and grammar errors, cute story!!!
I like it better if they show how they got together and not start when they are already a couple. Its so cute