Magic is only as strong as the one wielding it.
Magic.
From an early age he'd been captivated by it. Entranced by it's mystery and all the wondrous possibilities the secrets of the arcane contained. If only it was real. All the wishing in the world could never change that indisputable fact.
Until now.
Thrown into a world he wasn't prepared for, Sam finds out that wishes...................need to be earned.
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For those who aren't aware, I've completely remade and re-released this story. (There is a more detailed explanation in Author's Note of the Prologue)
Unfortunately however, I didn't realize that deleting the individual chapters would erase the comment sections for those two chapters that had been up.
Um.........whoops
I'm sorry to anyone whose comments were deleted. But don't worry, this new chapter is worth it.
May Harmony Guide You My Friends
well this is certainly well written so your improvements worked i guess?
Created, not summoned.
7053148 *fixed*
7052946 I'm glad you think so!
I certainly tried my hardest. I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapters!
Ah, the peaceful race of Equines, that would sooner hide from and/or flee an unknown creature, inexplicably going torch-and-pitchfork crazy... That sounds like a perfectly logical development, and the irreplaceable turn of events... Unless, the Equestrians have a differing mental set up form the show/Ponyville... Of course, you could just be taking their blatant speciesism to the next level, and have them forming lunch mobs against anything they don't recognize as pony, nor is accompanied by one... Either way, I'm very disappointed in their behavior, and will be writing a letter to their mothers.
All right! Sound good, let's see where it lead us to!
I hope that you plan on giving "Ashley" a role later on, rather then just a vague backstory for your tragic main character.
(Did you really name her Harmony by the way?)
Also wondering about the AU tag...
7054868...................And I've just received word back from their mothers. They thank you for informing them of their children's rotten behavior and will be taking the appropriate measures to punish them forthwith. (Groundings, no dessert plus extra spinach and broccoli are incoming!)
As to the dichotomy of their behavior between this and the show, without giving too much away, this isn't quite the Equestria that Sam (as well as us) know and love. Yet.
7054878 I'm excited to hear you like the story so far! I'm currently 3,000 words into the next chapter, and so far, it's shaping up to be even better than the last *crosses fingers*
The Alternate Universe tag is their because, well, lets just say that Sam's presence there will change certain things.
And do not worry. "Ashley's" part to play is not even close to being done.
For your question about whether I named her Harmony or not......................................I don't know..............................did I?
May Harmony Guide You My Friends
7055784 Many thanks for the punctual response. I understand you keeping the proverbial cards close to your chest, and will anticipate the forthcoming chapter.
nice keep it up man i like to see more XD
7056001 *Salutes* Than more you shall have
7055784 Many thanks for the punctual response. I understand you keeping the proverbial cards close to your chest, and will anticipate the forthcoming chapter.
7056017 :D
7055784
I think it is a misuse of the AU tag. If your story change thing, it's a story. Of course your new character is going to change the timeline, provoke event and so on.
An AU is when Equestria is radically different (even radically on occasion) before your story even begin.
Like if you make an Equestria where Celestia went insane insted of Luna, it is an AU.
Small differences and stuff that are left to interpretation in the show don't count.
7056212 Hmmm. Interesting. I can't spoil too much, but if you still feel the same after chapter two (which will expand on things further) please let me know and I'll take the AU tag off.
Just as a heads up for those of you who have already read the Prologue since it was redone, I've added/changed a few minor things to fit with what I have planned for the upcoming chapters. You might want to check it out; at least if you want context for chapter one.
May Harmony Guide You My Friends
The Scarce Moon Takes Notice Of You...
7064399 The Mystic feels an otherworldly presence around him, and looks up..................
Mmm. Yes, that setting could count as an AU, if the main story is in the "modern days". But if I am reading this correctly, then the story is about "Mythrin Arcacia" or rather Sam. I usually don't like these kind of settings, "Mythrin Arcacia" is getting unconfortably close to the Gary Stu territory.
I'll give you a chance, maybe you can pull it off and keep the story interesting. There is some clear talent and work behind this story.
Anyway, may I suggest making shorter chapter? There is a lot that could've been edited out of this chapter. We get it, Clestia and Luna are both liking Twi a lot. We get it, Mythrin was like more awesome then awesomeness, we get it, not much is avaible to the public about it. Can we move on a bit?
Also another small editing suggestion, Fim fiction is already displaying the chapter title at the top, putting it again in big bold letter is kinda redundant.
Allrigth, it's dumbed down for the filly, but I still had a short facepalm moment...
7068088 The point that the story is eventually trying to make is that while the modern ponies of Equestria see him as a "gary stu" if you will, history may in fact be coloring the actual perspective of things. A point that is made when it's revealed he was the one banished instead of Luna.
And the point of showing the emotional connection of the princesses and Twilight is trying to explain why she would be the first they would ever even consider telling their darkest secret to. I wanted to take the pace a little slower in this one as it's building up to a rather important story (at least to the two sisters).
I mostly put the title that way for the purpose of putting this story other places it might go. Plus I think it adds a certain flare (or maybe that's just me)
As to the weight issue, I didn't accurately explain myself. Weight, or how heavy an object is, is simply gravity pulling down from an incredibly dense object. Since the sun isn't being pulled against the surface of anything dense enough, you wouldn't have to technically fight the "weight" of the object to move it, just a whole host of other things that would probably take way to long to explain in a single chapter. Plus, my information was limited to what I could figure out from google, so that was less dumbing it down for Twilight and more for me.
This is the very first story I've ever written (and started as a practice one for a very different story I have in mind) so I definitely have a long way to go, but its fun to try anyways.
7068150 Might be cool. But I still think you dragged things a bit too much.
Gravity is always present. The Sun is always falling towards Equis and vive versa. The concept of weigth is indeed limited to "classic" newtonian physic, on small scale, but the rule behind it are universal.
7068209 Here's the quote from a larger scientific article I used for this chapter,
"The weight of an object is a force. It is the force with which a body is attracted toward Earth or another celestial body. This means that when you are in space, away from Earth, objects do not weight anything since they do not feel gravitational attraction to the Earth. What objects have though in space is mass. This is because mass is defined as the amount of material an object contains, and that doesn't change whether the object is on Earth, on the Moon, or anywhere in space."
That's basically what I was trying (In my own limited way) to explain. Ultimately though I took some liberties as it is a show with magic and unicorns
wow this is going to be a massive story
7068263 It Sure Is!!!!! *Insane Laughter*
*Passes Out*
7068088 Just so you know, after thinking about it, I'm making some edits to cut out a lot of the Mythrin Praising as it does kind of limit some of my ideas for later chapters as well as giving a false impression of the character. The edits are ongoing so look forward to it
7068232 Did you take in account the inertia? A big mass with a speed can be hard to redirect properly...
Physics at an astronomical scale is kinda complex...
7068470 Great!
7068494 All this proves to me is that I'm glad I didn't go for that astrophysics degree
I think I finished most of the edits, though I'll comb through it a few more times to make sure.
I am just gonna nitpick and say, stop writing ponies have arms! Unless they are pony-centaurs?
7068904 I'm just glad I remember to write somepony instead of somebody.
Man. I really like this story already. I can really relate to the main character and also like how you segued the end of this chapter into the beginning of the last one. I hope you "spend a little too long talking about the technical side of the magic system" because I like the character always like that. It's hard to find good books like that.
7075695 I'm really happy to hear you like the story so far!
And you can bet that someone as obsessed with magic as Sam is, will probably be just as obsessed with the inner workings of it. I know I would be
that was good :D
7081516 Thanks!
It is not very often I stumble upon such a great story. Keep up the great work.
7082747 Every time someone compliments this story I get the warm n' fuzzies
7082886
Well I tend to leave positive constructive criticism and just be a helpful reader. Also I decided to follow you considering this is your first story and so is very good. One of the many things I learned as a reader of online stories is that it's the ealy starting authors that have one or a few high rated stories that you should follow.
7068150 FIRST STORY?! How... W-what how is this so good? That's god damn amazing
Based on the other updates I expected this to commence much sooner. THE SUSPENSE IS KILLING ME!
7147659 I'm happy to hear your looking forward to it so much!
Don't worry though, it's definitely on it's way. The previous chapters just had the lucky fortune of being written during one of my rare vacations (and my manic period). 
So while they won't always update that fast, they are definitely still being worked on.
7145590 That means a lot to hear someone say that...........*sniff* I'm not crying I swear!!!
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7147746
Alright. But I want to see how the ponies respond to Mythrin and also how you end up handling magic.
EDIT: Does anyone else notice how Celestia holds the greatest doomsday weapon ever? I mean she could freeze a certain part of the planet by just altering the orbit or having Luna eclipse it every time it passes that area. Hell she could just have luna control the day/night cycle by eclipsing the sun and just kill half the planet. Not to mention if she or luna ever dropped either of their megaweapons.
I have to say that this is no doubt added to my favourites.
It's not often that i grow fond of a story after 2 chapters but this one hold great potential and the writing is wonderful.
I might not be able to comment on correct grammar and such but even then i know it's well written.
Here have a like! You deserve it
I like your use of fantastic racist slurs. I personally prefer boneheads, mud ponies and horseflies.
How often will we be cutting to the future? Because while I love the origin storyline so far I'm also somewhat invested in sweetie twilight with the two princesses and the Mage in the Moon.
Edit: I'm on mobile right now but do you mind if I point out spelling or grammar mistakes later?
7177712 The story's being told by Celestia and Luna to a curious filly who loves to ask questions, I somehow doubt it'll stay uninterrupted.
I'd also definitely appreciate it if you (or anyone) would point out any grammar or spelling mistakes you see. I don't have an editor to catch the ones I miss and I'm sure there are many. This is all fairly new to me as I've never written anything before (and certainly not something of this size) so I'm sort of flying by the seat of my pants.
First, this story went from a read later, to favorites and read twice in one day after the first chapter. DO. NOT. STOP. WRITING. THIS FIC!
Second, I'd like to know if you plan on running through the whole series after our mysterious Archmage comes back. Given how far back in the past the actual story is set, there's sooooo much that can happen. Two that come to mind are: what happened to Starswirl the Bearded, and the two alicorn's parents finally being shown. My only grip is we won't see him interacting with the mane six, or any of the other established background ponies.
Third, what about some of those other ponies? Twilight went to the school for gifted unicorns when she was young, so will we see that in the story? And what about Sunset Shimmer? How shall she factor into the tale? Will Twilight's personality change because she has two rules to guide her?
Forth: NEXT CHAPTER NOW! PLEASE! WANT MORE!
7185655 I'm excited to hear you love the story so much!
And don't you worry, there's no way in Tartarus I'd stop this fic so early in the plot, that would be cruel. 
As for running through the entire series after Mythrins "possible" return, holy hay does that sound daunting (especially so soon into the story of the past)
, but I wouldn't necessarily rule it out for a possible sequel though. If I haven't dropped dead from exhaustion by then. 
You are right however, there is a bunch of stuff to cover given the setting. I don't wish to give too much away so I'll just say that a lot will definitely be shown (if I can pull it off correctly).
The next chapter is coming along but I'm taking my time with this one, especially compared to the other two, which I churned out in six days. Due to the quickness with which I completed the first two chapters, the initial quality suffered, and I had to go back repeatedly to fix and polish them up (though I'm sure there are things I still need to tweak). When I release the next chapter, I want it to be as good as it could possibly be before it comes out. Not to mention I'm also working on polishing my overall outline for the story, which can only help things.
Just like you I'm really, really excited for the next chapter, and I can't wait to show it to everyone!
I'm absolutely blown away that this is the first thing you've ever written!
I've never written anything, and if I tried to, it couldn't even come close to something like this. You need to keep writing, I don't just mean this, but other things to. Also, don't worry about finishing the next chapter right away. If you need to take your time in order to keep the quality high than I'm more than willing to wait (even if the waiting will most likely kill me). 
*Edit* Sorry about the incomplete comment before. Hit post comment instead of preview.
I really liked your portrayal of the main character's angst over magic and his personal dreams.
I know the feeling. Not about magic specifically as your character does. But I know the feeling.