One tired afternoon, Desert Wind, Midnight Dream and Melody Star are bored. So they decide to read a book of fables and a fairy tale book.
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Phoenix Heart 27
"I often think that the night is more alive and more richly colored than the day."- Vincent Van Gogh
Phoenix Heart 27
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I'm pretty sure it's spelled "Desert Wind". Unless Dessert Wind tastes a lot better.
7045190 That's what it's supposed to be but my phone likes to be an asshole and auto-correct it every time I type it.
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I suggest disabling Autocorrect on your Phone when you're typing. Don't ask me how; I'ven't used an iPhone before (as surprising as it sounds!).
This is an interesting story idea, to say the least
Though, I think that it might be more fun having the characters reaching to and interacting with each other while the fables are being told. The story’d be more connected then. Also, Melody and her gang seem like an interesting bunch of OCs, so that would also be the right moment to show the readers more of them 
Also, are you retelling all these fables yourself or just ponyfying them?
And, my editor self can’t help on a bit of grammar nitpick; those commas that you are writing beside the direct speech shouldn’t be there. Also, it’s good to discern between speaking and non-speaking dialogue tags. When there is a speaking action present in the dialogue tag (said, replied, asked, commented etc.), the tag starts with lowercase letter (except for proper nouns and I). However, direct speech in such case cannot end with a period. A comma has to be in its place. (Question and exclamation marks, as well as ellipses, are alright there as well.) On the other hand, when the tag contains a non-speaking action (nodded, blushed, sighed etc.), the tag has to start with an uppercase letter and the direct speech cannot end with a comma. Period or other punctuation mark has to be there.
A lil’ bit of a lecture, sorry for that
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I shall take that suggestion into account greatly (don't tell anyone this but I had already had a general ideal of something like that actually happening soon). Also, any grammatical errors are the sole blame of my editor who, despite my nagging at him to do so, constantly forgets to backtrack this particular story for grammer errors or misspellings.
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I will keep tracking. And don’t worry, I won’t tell anyone!
Alright, it’s great to know that
Well, if he doesn’t edit, he is not much of an editor then, is he? Though, if I may ask, by backtracking, do you mean that you first publish it and he is then supposed to edit?
Also, it is possible that he doesn’t know about getting the direct speech wrong, so maybe you can brief him on it. Or if you wish, I can have a talk with him about it. With over thirty edited stories and countless chapters under my belt, I believe I can talk about experience
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Believe me, I've consulted him on that manner. Rest assured this story, amongst a few others, will be going under serious grammatical re-checks. The only stories that he doesn't edit or proofread of mine on here are actually my stories Lambs and Wolves and Love (and other things) in Prance. That's only because I edit those myself due to content accuracy and translation issues on each story.
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Alright, I’m happy to hear that! Many authors are kind of oblivious to the quality of their stories’ grammar and spelling, I’m glad you are not one of them.
If you ever need something, feel free to contact me via PM or comment.
Have a nice day and good luck in your writing!
-Ever
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I shall keep that in mind. Til next comment! à plus!
Why isn't Midnight Dream mentioned in the synopsis?
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Would you believe me when I say I genuinely forgot? I legit had to reread the synopsis to catch that! No worries. Things can be fixed as it is.
Oh, I have to admit, I've pretty much forgotten this story existed until I received the notification. Glad to see you're still writing.
PS: FIMFic allows you to add an Author's Note with specific formatting. You don't need to insert it in yourself in this way.
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NGL, I definitely forgot that (much less how to do that). Yes it surprised me that I updated this as well.