Long ago, the Alicorn of Creation has created the world of many species. She wanted to create an exciting world of heroes and villains. Many years have passed and the inhabitants has molded into civilizations. Heroes and villains were born and many wars was fought, thus history tell the tales of these great heroes and villains, such as Starswirl, Nightmare Moon, Grogar, and many others. But after the banishment of Nightmare Moon, the era of villains was no more. Even after a thousand years has passed, the great evil of the past has downgraded. Nightmare Moon's return was not much of a threat and so was the Spirit of Chaos. The tyrant king Sombra did not do much, the Changelings' first assault failed and Tirek has been beaten a few hours after he regained power. Devastated by these villains, the creator herself has descended upon her world and create a school in the badlands for villains. She named her school F.A.U.S.T.
F.A.U.S.T.
Faust's Academy for Unique Super Tyrants will welcome all new and old villains, where they will be evaluated for their skills and knowledge in EQ (Evil Quotient). Here you will learn from each other and acquire new evil skills and tactics by the creator herself. Do you have what it takes to be a true villain?
so faust is making evil acadamy
I like this.
This is a good.
And stop dying, it's rude.
Interesting. Be sure to use the correct tenses, and say "ling" with an apostrophe in front of it as it is an abbreviation ('ling).
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Thanks for the tip, most appreciated. Also i have trouble with tense, and a few other things.
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I have had attacks, always thought it was over and i was going to let go but a few hours later i'm all right in the ICU. The doctors and nurses really know what they are doing. I feel they are underpaid, these people aren't being paid enough for the things they have to do.
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Pretty much. With less murdering tho. Maybe lessons on efficient assassination using changelings for demonstration.
7004814 Happy to help!
I'm beginning to think Faust saw season 5...and decided to take drastic measures.
Hmm.... I think the idea is hilarious, and definitely a good one, but I feel that as what seems like it would be a comedic fic, it takes a strangely logical approach. For instance, if the chapter was about the changelings and fliers, why was half the chapter a rant on aloe? Getting sidetracked while writing is easy, but it lowers readability ALOT. Oh, and minor capitalization and punctuation errors. If you were to fix these, I could easily imagine this story as good as C.U.T.E.!
7062102 I agree.... Most of the chapter was about a plant and buying flowers in the middle of a Changeling swarm....
7004896 just wait until we see Flurry Heart, AKA Plot Device 2.0
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Thanks for the constructive criticism. I can't tell if some words should be capitalized or not. For example, The rainbow mane Pegasus, does rainbow and mane have to be capitalized too? I know I read somewhere that Unicorn, Earth Pony, Pegasus, Alicorn, and Changeling should always be capitalized. I've also realized that I have not capitalized all the I in this chapter, I will edit that now. I'm just not sure about titles such as 'the princess'. I know i have problems with punctuation, I will try my best to not make too many errors. I definitely need an editor for future chapters.
Also the rant on aloe doesn't take half of the chapter unless you also count the going to the spa rant. As for sidetracking. Applejack and Rainbow Dash realized that the Changelings weren't a threat early on, just annoying. So they let themselves get sidetracked. Near the end when everypony was getting sidetracked, Twilight was the only one looking over the flier trying to think of a way to approach the case. The threat of the Changeling swarm is equivalent to the dragon migration. I'm pretty sure the first time the dragons migrate through Equestria, ponies panicked until they realized there was no harm done and went on with their day.
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Flurry Heart is cute tho.
7062794 ok, so here's the thing:
-as far as I know, the race name shouldn't be capitalized unless it is part of the title of a character. And unrelated example is Sonic the Hedgehog. Hedgehog isn't a proper noun, but it's still a part of his name.
-the princess part depends. Unlike the race names, princess can be a word like a title. If it's attached to the name itself, yes. If not, no. Example: "Princess Twilight read a book. Everyone knows the princess does this, but for some reason in particular, it had to be mentioned."
Oh, and I'm on my phone, so I can't see under spoiler tags :/
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Thanks for the tip, I will keep that in mind when writing and editing.
- As for the race name, topics such as this and this one confuse me. Here I am knowing I'm not that good of a writer and I stumble across topics like these, and now I don't really know if what I wrote is correct because there will always going to be someone who views it from one side and start criticizing.
Also there is that comment in one of the topic that the Hasbro's book The Journal of the Two Sisters and the show's transcript, pony races are capitalized. So race name is a battle between proper grammar and canon (If this is actually canon).
7062911 well, most people don't do it that way. If it's controversial like that, then you as the author decide, so yeah.
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Again, thanks for the tip. If the pony race thing gets too complicated with the comments, I will revert back to how it is supposed to be capitalized in English.
7063047 welcome, happy to help ;)
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I would buy flowers in a middle of a Changeling swarm, as long as they don't bother me too much.
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7004896 'See's season five ' Well shit, we need better villains. ' Gets on the phone' God, we have a situation. Our villains suck.
Interesting beginning, go Chryssie go!
Huh, so they're stronger now.
... Awesome Chrysalis Avenue, sounds about right.
I'm starting to find this interesting ...
Will this story ever be updated again?
Why did you cancel this?
Why cancel whyyyyyyyyy
It was so good