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7512789 Thanks for the pointer. It has been fixed.
7705912 Thank you for the comment and fair critique!
Sniffle, I am getting closer and closer to catching up with the story. I sure hope that you soon will write some more! I have read my fair bit of different FoE stories, and yours are something unique, a lovely well told tale which danger level dosn't explode into the atmosphere in some silly way. I have honestly only found one other story that felt so... well "believable".
Nitpicks:
"There better be something valuable to pilfer from this place." Pretty sure that you had a tense slip up here
"That meant there were all sorts of important war–time artifacts gathering dust in here. " And here as well
"No mechanical whirring or gun clicking or lazer charging" laser
"All the bullets wound up hitting the door frame," The "bullets" of a shotgun is called "lead" or "shots"