Page generated in 0.013 seconds
Total duration
781 users online
560,508 hits today, 1,960,719 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Love the reference to the king. Just great
The king reference was a little unneeded, but it will prove good if he turns up later on. I just feel enough time was devoted to that character to not be a throw away one.
As always, the primary joy of your stories are your characters. you define them fantastically and each one breathes their own life. I love their contrasting personalities, mannerisms and even in the way they speak.
Your locations however, for all your descriptions, seem to be devoid of a lot of life. They feel like places to pad through but they dont feel like homes of anypony else. so maybe some more interaction with locals on a personal setting in terms of description is needed.
I like the characters names, and the slavers themselves really stuck in my mind. if they dont appear later on in the story, I will be sorely disappointed.
Fantastic chapter, keep it up!!!
Was that a "Worlds End" reference? Will we getting easter eggs in the form of cornettos from now on? One can only hope!