a short sad story about a mare that was everything in thing in the world to Vinyl Scratch.
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Well even thou it was a romance fic...... I still enjoyed it. Just one thing.... Should this have already happened in Remix
I'm confused, did Octavia just vanish, or was the begining just a dream?
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I gues you could call it a dream. It was alot of hings actualy. Mostly it acted to show the love that was once had. Hard to explain and im a little short of time at the moment. sorry.
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remix was more of an actual story. This is more of an abstract and poetic wright. Not exactly ment to be varry realistic. just emotional.
My brain has been fucked.... Agein
That was beautiful. Thank you very much for that story!
I really liked it, but there's one big thing. I was completely confused. Did Octavia vanish? Commit suicide? And why didn't we know about Pinkie's party beforehand? You need more background info. Maybe Pinkie inviting Vinyl, maybe Octavia saying something about dying or something.. I don't know. All I know is that you don't have nearly enough background info and that made it very confusing. I also can't imagine Vinyl acting like that, frankly. I'd imagine Tavi doing that more.
But of course, constructive criticism goes hand in hand with praise. You have a very nice style of writing, it's very strong despite being so unclear. You didn't have many errors, and the last part where she was singing was very touching. Brava~
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I am confused, but okay~ ^.^
813964 the person who rote this story died?
I do not know why but it reminds me to this: