I like to build and draw my own designs. I make armor, weapons, and toys out of metal and leather. I like reading and writting books.
It has been a year since Nyx was adopted by Twilight. They and their friends are having a nice time when all of a sudden, they found themselves preoccupied with an unlikely friend.
Nyx was made by Penstroke from the story "Past Sins." Please give credit where and to whom it is due.
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MORE!!!! Please
Ill do my best to write the story :)
6729666 i like your story so far
Thanks, I've wanted to publish a book for years but never knew how to do it. Now I do :3
Thanks. It's a bit patchy. But I'll work on it. I'll also keep you posted on any chapter editing.
Hey everyone. Thanks for your support and helping me get 200 reviews. I'm so excited about this story and hope to get plenty of feedback from you all. Thanks agan and I will talk to you all later.
Teotle :)
I like wolves so any story that involves wolves I read it till the end.
Thanks. Feel free to point out any story contradictions or any spelling errors if you like. I know I can be a bit sloppy with my work.
If you do find any mistakes and want them corrected, please copy and paste the sentence and what chapter its in.
Thanks again
Teotle ;)
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TAKE THAT BIIIITCH !!!!!!!!
Way to go Teotle you rock
This chapter was a little to rushed. But was still good
to RainbowCoolDash
what would you like done to improve it?
Feel free to share ideas or thoughts on any part you like.
Thanks :)
Hey what's up everypony.
Thanks for helping me get my first 500 views.
You're all awesome and I appreciate your support.
I hope you are enjoying he story. I hear that the latest chapter, "Enemies become Friends", was a little rushed. I think I understand why, so I'm going to try to fix it. other than that, thanks again and I will talk to you all later.
Hey everypony, Happy New Year!
I hope you've had fun with family and friends. I am going into welding college on the 17th, so it may take a while to make and upload new chapters. i hope you don't mind the wait, but the good news is it gives me more time to think about how the chapters should be written, and I should have some good ideas.
Hope everypony is enjoying the story, and i'll talk to you all layer :)
Well that happened
You'll have to wait till the chapter 19 "Here Comes the Calvary".
Don't worry though, because I'll start the rough draft and post it soon :)
I like the story and how it's playing out but there are a few things I'd like to address which would improve the story and your writing in general. First of all is by proofreading your work. There lots and I mean lots of grammar and spelling mistakes which start from chapter one all the way to your latest which just makes things confusing because I don't understand what you're trying to tell me. Another thing is that sometimes the way you put the story is a little bit confusing and it just makes it a little bit difficult to follow because while I'm reading this, most of the time I'm trying to figure out what I just read. Other than that I am really enjoying this story and I'm looking forward for the next installment.
Ok, i get what your saying, and its very much appreciated. Ill get some friends together and try to go over the story's grammar and everything. We'll make this story worth reading for our fellow Bronies.
Thanks again
Teotle :)
Please I need more
This is a great story so far. Keep it up
Ok, I guess I can proof read the story after I finish the rough draft. I'll post as much as I can and fix it later.
Hey everypony, Thanks for being patient with this chapter. Like I said, I am starting welding class in collage so it'll be hard for me to go at my usual passe but don't worry. Ill keep writing. This chapter might be a bit confusing at first but it's supposed to help answer some questions that were left unanswered in the last few chapters. Let me know if you like it or if it needs work . I know i need to work on my spelling. I'll fix it after the story is done.
Thanks and Ill talk to you all later :)
Now that was awesome. Keep it up Teotle. You are doing great.
Thanks,
It was a little short for my taste but i like how the story is going so far.
I like it but the grammar is bugging me.
Will Princesscelestia and Princessluna be in this too? What about Bigmac?
More please
i'm stuck again
Hey everypony. Sorry about the delay, and the fact that the chapter was so short. I was stuck and I ran out of content. The next volume will come out soon. I just need to think of the layout of the story. Thanks for the support and the views. please tell your friends. I will edit the story's spelling for those who couldnt read it before. It'll be done in a few weeks or so. I hope you enjoyed and Ill talk to you all later.
Teotle
Is the wolf mentioned in the synopsis your OC?
Teotle is an OC
When you going to update Teotle
I just updated the first chapter.
........
i just finished updating this chapter.
Pro tip: names of ponies are usually two words, not one garbled mess like you have it here.
I.e, 'Nightmare Moon', not 'Nightmaremoon', 'Pinkie Pie', not 'Pinkiepie', 'Rainbow Dash', not 'Rainbowdash'.
It takes five seconds to look this shit up on the Internet, and the rest of the grammar is awful too. So awful, in fact, that I couldn't read the story. But from what I did read, you need an editor, and the whole thing is very obviously a self-insert, something that's going to throw a lot of people off reading it.
I'll take your advice to heart dude, thanks.
7280897 I know this is a little late but......give Teotle a break. This was his/her first time writing a story.
Hey, liking the story. But am I missing a prior story? Some of the context is leading me that way.
7918116 this is a fan fiction of "past sins", by Penstroke.
I Love that rhyme.,
7936614 Thanks, I spent 30 minutes trying to fit the words together.
7918116 you need to read past sins by Pen Stroke to understand more
8209652 I did read it. Have I over looked something important?
8209652 Oh, wait, you were talking to somepony else. My bad, I been having trouble trying to decipher the format of this website.
6756585
I haven’t found any even if I do here’s my reaction.
*finds a mistake* Eh whatever *continues reading*
Nice Job Breaking Hero chapter.
7280897
As his best friend irl, he’s admitted to not be the best at spelling and grammar. I don’t appreciate such a comment being made about his character’s backstory that he worked so hard on. For real, please cut him some slack. I’m helping him with correcting his writing errors throughout all of his stories, which he recognizes isn’t the best.
If you don’t have anything nice to say don’t say anything at all.
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First off, I made that comment literally three years ago and had completely forgotten about this story until now. Second, it’s impossible to improve if you don’t know what’s wrong. If all your friend gets is unending praise, then he’ll never get a chance to learn and grow better. Like it or not, this story must have had technical problems or I wouldn’t have left that comment (although, as previously mentioned, it’s been three years and I don’t remember the story at all). I am in no way obligated to spare the author’s feelings when writing comments, sad as it is. Ripping the plaster off is how I operated back then.
Seems legit