Family? Friends? Country? Updraft, an Enclave officer undercover in the Wasteland, is forced to rethink his relationships with his old life and his new. And what will he do if the fates of ponies rest on his decision? Will he choose wisely?
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Thanks! Glad you liked it! Thank you for sticking with it!
5 days and many MANY hours later, I finally caught up on this story.
Wow, how interesting this story has gotten! And that's what I like when a story keeps me on the edge of my seat waiting to see what happens next.
The whole situation with One nearly had me crying, though my eyes were watery a lot when I was reading those scenes.
And I must say that I do love that stallion, Last Stand even though he doesn't appear much.
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If there is one thing that really bugged me enough when reading your story is the lack of adding a "line break" or whatever it's called in the chapters to let the reader know that a certain amount of time passed. Sure, there were points when I knew that moment was coming up but, still it just bothered me too much.
Other than that though! There is really nothing else wrong with the story and I can't wait and see what happens to Dust and friends and his choices and everything else.
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Thanks for reading my story and I am glad you are enjoying it!!!
I was hoping the time passing in my story was handled well enough by my choice of transition words, but it is a piece of advice I will keep in mind!
Thanks again!
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You're welcome and alright