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While Applejack automatically tunes out the normal background noises of Sweet Apple Acres, out of place sounds always get her attention, even gentle ones. She notices such a sound while heading back home for supper, and finds Fluttershy in the orchard. The reason for Fluttershy's visit turns out to be one Applejack hadn't thought of.

Cover art by Evehly.
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Eruantalon

Eruantalon #1 · Nov 23rd, 2015 · 1 · ·

Beautiful idea. Even the trees are Fluttershy's friends.

Astrarian

Astrarian #2 · Nov 23rd, 2015 · 1 · ·

6660147 Exactly! Glad you liked it.

Astrarian

Astrarian #3 · Nov 23rd, 2015 · 2 · ·

6662565 I'm glad you liked it. As you mentioned, I really did sneak this one out. I've been busy IRL and that had affected my time to write, and I get pretty angsty when I feel I can't write. I was actually looking at some of the stuff I'd written and wondering how I ever did it. So I just threw my anxiety over my longer works away and expanded this one and chucked it out here, basically to make myself feel better!

It does perhaps feel as though I could play a drinking game with the number of times the word 'Fluttershy' is mentioned

Haha, yes! I mean, I have found in my MLP writing that I have a problem describing a character as anything other than their name, which is only worsened by the fact that the mane 6 are all female. It's an aversion to Lavender Unicorn Syndrome, but it goes a little too far the other way... (Coincidentally, I would call it 'Butter Yellow Pegasus Syndrome' - that description is the one that makes me cringe most of all in MLP fanfic, which just happens to work against this minific.)

Seriously though, it's a fair point. I've had a couple of comments before about making it clear who is speaking and who I am referring to, and though it is tougher because the MLP stuff I'm interested in usually doesn't involve male characters, I could very well have swung too far the other way. Probably should remind myself next time that occasionally using 'unicorn', 'pegasus' and 'earth pony' as descriptions won't make people's (ie. my own) eyes burn...

Blazewing

Blazewing #4 · Nov 24th, 2015 · 3 · ·

Very sweet. We don't see enough of Applejack and Fluttershy having time together, sharing common ground.

Astrarian

Astrarian #5 · Nov 24th, 2015 · 1 · ·

6662927 I think so too! Thank you for the favourite and for the kind feedback, I appreciate both.

MaggotKing556

MaggotKing556 #6 · Nov 24th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Really enjoyed that story.

Astrarian

Astrarian #7 · Nov 24th, 2015 · 1 · ·

6664177 Thank you, I'm glad it worked for you!

6664334 I'll bear that advice in mind. I'm building up a list of extra considerations for reviewing my work thanks to your continuing feedback.

One of the best pieces of advice I ever got when having creative difficulties is to step away from writing completely for a spell. It works, at least for me, but not writing makes me jittery and incomplete.

I really like the description that not writing makes you incomplete, as that's how I feel too. A weekend away with a change of scenery normally helps me, but I haven't had a chance to do that this month.

Thanks for your comments here. I actually read the first chapter of Punch Drunk! yesterday, so I'm going to give it a re-read and then give some feedback. You'll see my name again soon!

Loganberry

Loganberry #8 · Dec 8th, 2015 · 2 · ·

Hello! Just dropping in to give this story the upvote it deserves. I know you've read my full review on the blog, so I'll keep this short and just say that I enjoyed this piece of simple friendshipping. Not all fics need vast quests or terrifying monsters, and this is a good example of why.

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