A strange creature of shadow saved Fluttershy from a hungry manticore. At first, the timid pony was deathly afraid of this being, but within a short time she had began to become friends with it. The only thing that troubles Fluttershy is that the shadowy creature is completely silent, but she soon learns more about this creature and it's origin. She thought she was right fear nightmare moon, or Tierk, but the more she learns of this dark creature the more she learns that she was so very wrong.
Chapters (1)
has good potential
Can be your editor during next Tuesday.
Not bad. It has potential it we will have to see.
Good luck!
I look forward to more.
6649125 Thanks!
6648621 Ok, sound good.
You spelled "prison brawl" wrong.
Sorry, couldn't resist.
6650248 Did I seriously type that!?
You mean "causing" and "muscular".
You should remove that "was".
You mean "looking" and "into".
You mean "had".
Also, whenever a character speaks, you should always treat it as the beginning of a new paragraph. I hope this helps!
Do everyone a favor and update this. It's got potential.
Kinda hoping for a continuation of this. Like Azazel said: It's got potential.
7832303 I really can't. For a while now my PC has been down, sorry.
Update the godamned story I need to read a good story
What is the creature called it looks familiar