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#1 · Nov 29th, 2011 · · ·

That was...... AMAZING more pleeeeeeeeease I suggest a 2nd person story at some point

Theorangefox

Theorangefox #2 · Nov 29th, 2011 · · ·

44315 Thank you so much for your feedback! Originally this was going to have both the spa ponies in it, but it was hard to make it work so I stuck to just the one! Don't forget to read my other clopfics here, thanks again!

#3 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

This was not a mere clopfic, it was an experience!
While the initial transistion from arkward to porn scene was slightly too hard and sudden, the rest of this story surely makes up for it.
The only qualm I have is the inconsistnecy, whereapon you seem to have set the story in a humanised version of equestria (hands, breasts ect.)
but at the beginning and end you commence once again with "ponytized" description of things. This unfortunately drives me to imagine some furry/anthro/hybrid **** and **** which is very bad indeed (for me).

However your writing quality does indeed shine here, and I will look at whatever else you have to offer once it is complete.

Theorangefox

Theorangefox #4 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

58520 Thanks for the feedback I'm glad you enjoyed it. But yeah all of my works have anthro/hybrid ponies in them, I hope this doesn't put you off reading them.