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The second of my Equestria Girls fic in which Sunset finally goes to talk to Flash Sentry about what happened during their "relationship". She also takes the time to give Trixie some friendship advice that the Great and Powerful one might not be too interested in taking. What will happen? Well read the story to find out!
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And where were they in the Friendship Games?
Aside from a few missing commas and spelling mistakes here and there, pretty good stuff!
Seriously, a nice Sunset character piece; I really liked her conversation with Flash. Being a closet FlashSet shipper on the side, I always wondered what was the score between them and whether there could be anything more to it. I suspect that, with time, they will come to be very, very good friends but anything else would require Flash being disabused of his notion of a romance with the alien princess!
Maybe you can do a squeal of how Trixie became friends with the Rainbooms. And what happened to her bandmates.
I legit thought this was going to be a Rainbow Dash joke at first, but Rarity fits the bill too,
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Well, after finally finishing a review I've been working over for... wow, for over a freaking month, no less, AHEM! I've finally read the 2nd episode of your series.
To which... I really don't have much to say, really. It was okay, but nothing stands out overall. To go part by part...
I was surprised and slightly disappointed that this episode took place after Rainbow Rocks. Mainly 'cause you had made a very good job at establishing post-first-EG Sunset, which I haven't seen explored at all ever since RR came into place, and I was left hoping to see more of that girl struggling to get better. Oh well I guess, not really something to blame you for anyway. Just a personal nitpick.
Next comes the scene with Flash. At this point, while I'm still leagues away from being a fan of the guy, I've mostly come down to conclusion that hey, we're clearly stuck with the guy, so might as well make the best outta it. For what's worth, so, the scene with him was well done. It barely does anything to flesh out his character beyond what the movies has given us (which he's in desperate need of), but it works for what you intended. And credit where it's due, the last part of that was as awkward as you could make it.
My only real nitpick here has to do with the last scene. Well, second to last if we count Trixie's moment with her lackeys as one. It's not the idea itself, though. Both the idea and the comparison drawn between both characters is good, most certainly. My beef is with the way Sunset addresses it, or rather, the ease of it. Basically, that Sunset calls Trixie out like it's nothing but second nature to her, or it's the easiest thing to do in the world, when it isn't, at least not for her. Maybe Pre-EG Sunset Shimmer, then yeah, but...
You see, one of the plot points during the second movie was that Sunset had noticed the disharmony among the Mane 6, as the story progressed and their stress grew, yet held back from saying anything because she didn't feel like it was her place to call them out, not when she was still just barely grasping the concept of friendship.
Granted, development and all that, but weaknesses aren't properly portrayed if the characters can just leave them behind after overcoming them once. I'm not saying Sunset calling Trixie out shouldn't have happen, just that there was something of a wasted opportunity right there to have Sunset shine brighter because of pushing herself for the sake of saying that.
But like I said, it's not something bad, just short of great. Beyond that, for what's worth, I feel like it was best to end the fic right where you did.
So, down with two chapters. Let's see what the next one holds in store.
Yours, “Impossible to Reform” Alexander, the Godslayer.
Later!
Really good