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Looking good so far, I'm eager to see where you will go with the story, maybe some political intrigue with different reactions from various kingdoms/individuals, some fearful (accusations of alien invasion), some peaceful (cultural exchange) an some devious (spies trying to steal his tech). Also I'm curious what the First Contact 'kit' contains, perhaps it will make an appearance?
6763320 Mainly the first contact package is the same thing that Voyager 1 carries on the golden disk it has with some exceptions as a few things added in over the centuries. And I hope to add in a few of the things you asked about as well as the story goes on and once the language barrier is broken of course.
Update rate?
6763629 Pretty much whenever I feel like it lol, I just felt a bit of creative energy to get it out. Normally I try for once a month but as you see I got three in this month. I do have some other stuff I work on as well so updates may not like this but I'll always try my best with the updates. Plus I generally aim for over four thousand words per chapter at least.
6763423 Here's some research stuff that might help you with the story. Post-detection policy and Potential cultural impact of extraterrestrial contact
6763805 Thanks I'll take a look at those when I got the time
6763869 Yeah I know I have issues with my writing and I know I'm not perfect and there will be mistakes. I don't think it's as bad as you make it out to be but then that could be just your personal taste on what you like to read as well. Last time I tried an editor it didn't work out well so that's unfortunately why I don't got one. I do try my best but sadly this might be the best I can do, if you don't like that I'll understand you dropping this story and I wouldn't blame you for it. I wish I could do better but sometimes it just feels like I hit a wall with how much I've improved since I first started years ago.
Definitely a lot of structural issues in this story. The worst by far is the run-on sentences, like Minalkra said. I'm a bit disappointed that they haven't been fixed in the time since his comment...
We're off to see the Alicorn! The wonderful Alicorn of the Sun!Edit: Just came back from reading the next chapter. After the lack of Alicorns, I double checked the chapter title and realized that I had misread it here. x2
Also, glad to see an author remember that Diamond Dogs exist. So many crossovers, from Starfox to Huckleberry Hound, keep forgetting that bipedal canines are a thing that exists in canon.
You use the word 'just' a lot
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Might be the case from your perspective. But as a matter of fact, there are really to many typos, awkward phrasings, or run on sentences.
No criticism towards the setting and everything, but typos and redundant use of the same word in either the same sentence or the following are much too frequent. The same goes for grammar, not withstanding the many blocks of text without any commas.
There is also the issue with past tense errors, but those I could blame on auto correction, I know this happens to me quite a lot with my office programs.
Again, nothing against the story itself since I do quite like it, but the frequent errors and blocks of on going text, without halt and separation via commas, really kind of stagnate the joy of reading. Sometimes I even have to look twice with a big question mark floating over my head, regarding what I just read, only read it again.
And then I'd be like: "Wait a sec, shouldn't that sentence be constructed like this?"
... So yeah, that is a rather prominent issue.