Octavia’s relationship with her partner was once a paradise. But now, dissimilarities run rampant; they don’t like the same things and conversations that work tend to be repeats of the old ones. When Octavia finds fault with her partner's behavior towards their one-year anniversary and a friend suggests moving to a nearby small town to get her mind off things, Octavia soon jumps at the chance and finds a place in Ponyville.
But some wounds aren’t healed so easily, some hearts hold on to things for longer, and first impressions can be the hardest to break. Especially when Octavia finds someone who reminds her a little much of what once was a near perfect life.
Octavia x Neon Lights with slow buildup.
Thank you to Ceffyl Dwr for prereading, editing, and advice.
Started before "Slice of Life".
Ouch. That was harsh that Octavia slapped Vinyl. I like where this is going.
wow. . . wasn't expecting a rational discussion between Octavia and Vinyl in this chapter. nice to see your more, "human" take on relationships.
and yet I know you're holding back what Vinyl wants to say or do. I hope we get to read some chapters from Vinyl's perspective, how she's coping with the big changes, what's going through her head regarding Octavia.
have a favorite. I expect you not to disappoint!
6568596 And here's where it gets fun: This is not an OctaScratch fic. They break up next chapter and do not/will not get back together.
Also, a sabbatical is an actual thing; those who take a sabbatical normally take a break away from their regular work, but are often required to list a reason for it. So instead of a straight vacation, one usually provides a goal that they work towards and are supposed to show some sort of progress at the end of it, as the sabbatical is usually paid.
6569831
About the response: Sorry about that; clicking on the comment took me to the main fic page and then I proceeded to write the comment from there after forgetting it doesn't immediately take you to the chapter in question.
About why you should care: admittedly, I know it's a bad idea. But part of me hopes that story wins out over ship preference eventually. Thing is, I really like where I'm going with it now, but I might have shot myself in the foot to start even though I can't think of a better entry point.
still wondering if you'll switch to Vinyl and how she's currently doing, but no worries if this is mainly an Octavia centered story.
Just finished rereading this, because fimfiction messed up and didn't tell me it updated 3 more times. Also, is Neon Lights, This guy?
6635793
Yes.
Ok, We have Frederick Horseshoepin, Octavia, Noteworthy... I think we just need Beauty Brass and that's all of Octavia's Friends.
Not my cup of tea, but stil l pretty good
I was pleasantly surprised by the maturity of the storytelling. It feels very SoL, and I'm looking forward to reading more, especially since I like seeing people explore non-traditional pairings (with one notable exception, of course). One suggestion: I didn't notice any descriptions of facial expressions for either of the characters, and as such, their emotions felt a little flat to me. Spending a little more time with Octavia's internal feelings might help me engage with her more. I'm loving that both she and Vinyl are very clearly flawed from the get-go, however.
On to chapter 2!
6730500
"SoL"? Is that just shorthand for "slice of life" or are you referring to a fic?
And hopefully the facial expressions will work a little bit more later on; I have an editor who's been helping me out with that a lot and later chapters should be a little better on that.
Really liked the discussion at the end. I think you tended to over-describe some of the scenery, or maybe it just seemed that way because of the many locales. I'm liking the overall pacing so far, though.
Also, this?
I freaking love this and everything it implies. It's always cool to see that an author is thinking outside the canon in terms of what the world must be like.
6730598
It might have been the locales; I went over a lot of places that will be revisisted numerous times in later chapters, so it was good to get a feel for them as well as show Octavia and her thought process apart from Vinyl. The other thing is I do tend do overdo it; there is a theater scene later on that my editor told me to cut down about 100 words because I over-described it.
Imagine my surprise encountering a fic for my OTP...
I will say that this is very well written, excluding the occasional grammatical error here and there. I look forward to this story continuing.
Alas!
Here before me lies a dead fic!
Please, be respectful and do not mire it.
This is a great fic. I like the pair, the setting as well as the overall theme of the story. Octavia taking a break from the hustle and bustle of the city to enjoy sometime in the country is definitely an overappreciated concept. Too bad this story won't be continued. I like it a lot.