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Neutral Boy


First time of writing my own stories on here since the first episode of my little pony friendship is magic.

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Meet Edward Frost an 18 year old average, clueless or sorta, and genius boy that had a bad life since he couldn't remember of what happened 8 years ago. Since graduating from high school he hasn't gotten along with making friends and his family had gone separate ways enjoy their own friends. He was gonna pack up to wait for his family coming back from vacation, until a certain Discord came to his world to meet with Edward Frost. Discord offers him a chance at finding a peaceful life in another world of familiar ponies to Edward. How will Edward handle it when he's going to see Twilight and her friends again, which he has no memories about them years ago? Dun Dun Duuuuuuun!!!

This story is at the time after Twilight and her friends that defeated Discord who was turned back into stone again. Before going into battle of Queen Chrysalis, King Sombra, Sunset Shimmer, Tirek, and the Dazzles...yet. Also though some characters will be in the story for some time in the later chapters heh heh.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 7 )

Okay, I don't wanna be rude, but you have a lot of mistakes and your story's style is WAY below from excellent, dude. Try to improve your story more, okay? But, great story anyways.

Thumbs up!

6543265 It's okay I'll be going to improve more in the chapters of the story. I just have to know of what the character is feeling right now. Just make sure to keep reading my story and comment on it if you want and tell your friends about this story. Also though there will be some characters that will make their appearances in the later chapters.

Comment posted by Elric of Melnipony deleted Dec 20th, 2015

Just a heads up when I put this and I know I have no room to talk but.....as I've read this story I have noticed quite a bit of grammar errors and words being where they shouldn't be, and tbh in the beginning I felt as if the story was a bit rushed in some parts. But over all this seems to be a good story that will surely turn into an awesome interpretation of Edwards journey though equestria with a hint of mystery (ie: how did he show up in equestria the first time?, what's this about another human, why did the six's memories get blocked and who/what did it?, etc) keep doing your best and never give up. Lightning crash out!:rainbowdetermined2:

7856111 Thanks and yeah I may have put in some errors and rushing in the story, my bad. :derpytongue2: I'll be sure to fix them up after I write in like four or five chapters that are ready to be submitted when they are ready.

Also though there will be more mysteries, including some other surprise characters and things that'll appear right in front of Edward. :pinkiegasp: Not gonna say on who or what they are, but it'll more shocking to him on what's really going on in Equestria. :twilightoops:

WTF? Why did Celestia get so angry so quickly, bipolar much? Also, I’m sorry but I am not a fan of Edward. Anyone with a real tragic past would not be willing to just spew out their whole life story just like that no problem. Also if he truely had a real tragic past, he would have a lot of mental issues but yet he is perfectly fine and normal. This is a common annoying cliche in Human In Equestria fanfics and it needs to stop. Sorry, for my rant but i just see so many of these stories and they all have the same problems.

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