The Lost Fog

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Changing the story a bit, I'm going to make Namasaki into a different ship because my friends wouldn't shut up about it. Namasaki is now going to be an A-150 class super battleship. if you don't know what that is, look up the A-150 design. The reason being because the arrangement for the Tone was a little awkward but I digress: Namasaki is a A-150 class super battleship who is tasked with destroying the port city of Yokosuka, but as his escort Mogami and him suddenly come under attack from I-401 and the blue fleet, Namasaki is suddenly taken to the world of Equestria. In this new world he will make friends, find love, and fight some powerful enemies. But he is a Fog, what could go wrong?
-Does include Celestia and Luna X OC like other version, I am in need of editor and cover art. Namasaki's ship colors will be the same as he was with the Tone but different ship as I said earlier.-

Chapters (6)

Ch-1 The Battle (Ending Fixed) · 14th Sep 2015 · 3,516 words
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Ch-2 Meeting some royalty (Fixed) · 30th Sep 2015 · 2,854 words
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Ch-3 Creating peaceful relations · 10th Nov 2015 · 2,306 words
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Ch-4 Hanging Out With The Night · 1st Dec 2015 · 3,672 words
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Ch-5 Hanging out with the night Pt: 2 · 5th Jan 2016 · 3,357 words
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Ch-6 The Monster · 10th Feb 2016 · 3,274 words
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gamer91

gamer91 #1 · Nov 4th, 2015 · · · Ch-2 Meeting some royalty (Fixed) ·

To be honest I liked how the old version went better but this is good to. Also is Cadenza even out yet in English? I tried to find it online yet I couldn't find anything. I watched ARES NOVA after I read the first version and I really liked the story.

Brony_cruiser

Brony_cruiser #2 · Nov 10th, 2015 · · · Ch-3 Creating peaceful relations ·

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I honestly don't know. Thank you by the way for liking the older version but it didn't really sit right with me for some reason and with the new story, its going to force me to have to make some edits to my original story but I will keep the chapters going as fast as I can. Otherwise thank you for liking it and keep reading, I am already working on the next chapter where SPOILER: he meets Pinky Pie and gets very confused. About the first question, I honestly don't know. I've been trying to follow it as best as I can but I get to wrapped up in all the going on in the world so I have little time to see anything.

gamer91

gamer91 #3 · Jan 5th, 2016 · · · Ch-5 Hanging out with the night Pt: 2 ·

Constructive criticism? The only thing I have to say so far is that it may be unwise to start another story at this point. Due to the fact that you have already rewritten this story because you didn't like how it went you would likely get caught up in the other story and this would sit for a long while. I've seen it happen multiple times.

Brony_cruiser

Brony_cruiser #4 · Jan 6th, 2016 · · · Ch-5 Hanging out with the night Pt: 2 ·

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Thank you and it is noted. I will not start on the new story yet as I want to wait a while before finalizing anything. I will continue to work on this story full time and work on the other one on my pass time. Thank you for the advice and I will follow it. Have a nice day and keep on reading!!