Pumpkin was shown the error of her ways. Hard to judge someone when you come from a different background.

the tree was a nice touch. A house tree

Also shows us the true nature of zeniths magic... nature

Buttermilk and Pumpkin.........don't know why but this chapter has me craving for some ice-cream for some reason....

This is turning in something different then I expected. Really good...

I don't know why I thought that this would be a short story

I just remembered that this is Kudzu. I felt very stupid

6425106 silly silly person

This story's not really my cup of tea; but before I go, I have one bit of advice. You should change your description.

It misleads potential readers into thinking Zenith's attraction to Celestia will be the main focus of the story. When it actually has had very little impact on events so far and is really more of an unrelated personality trait. People like me who where expecting a charming x-rated romance will be let down since that doesn't seem to be the story's point at all. It's not a bad story it's just not what was advertised.

Uhh, kudz, what have you done to me. I read the first sentence and saw Buckminister instead of buttermilk. Ahhhh!

Pumpkin glanced at Zenith and saw that he was off in Lala Land.

Once i read this, i went from imagining a heavily concentrating unicorn to cross eyes, tongue swinging around with a goofy face singing a song that is filled with 'la'.