Lose a bet with your girlfriend and have to put on a costume of her choice. She decides to prank you with the costume of a colorful horse. The next day you can't find the zipper.
“Oh I don't know...” Jasmine began and Tom pulled out all the stops and stooped to the puppy dog eyes. Jasmine look at it for a bit, then snickered. She tried to contain it as the look continued. Then she giggled. “Oh Tom all you're missing is the paper with the hug written on it with a question mark. Fine I'll go jogging with you.” Tom jumped up and cheered.
‘Nice! Might as well see how strong I am now?’ She went over to the area that had the dumb bells and chose a medium size weight. It felt too light in her hands, so she tried another.
Fun Fact: in the old days people used to exercise by lifting church bells. As you can imagine, though, those were noisy and far too big for casual exercise. Sooo... Somebody came up with much smaller "bells"that didn't make any sound, hence, dumb bels.
“I saw many pony costumes for children in that costume store. What happened to those children?”
No, you didn't. Tom has never seen the store as he was at work/home when Jessica bought the costumes. I can see how Tom can assume childrens costumes there considering MLP is a kids show but he can not claim to have seen anything in the shop. I do realize I am commenting on a 1.5+ year old chapter but THAT bugged me so much while reading.
“For now, yeah. When we finally get out of here I’ll really face this and deal with the ugliness of it all. Getting out is more important for if what you heard was right then I don’t want to spend the rest of my life as a prisoner in this totalitarian gulag.” She nodded and started for the cafeteria which should be in the final hour of supper. (New paragraph) “Tom, just promise me that you will include me when you do face that issue.” (New paragraph) She looked at Jasmine and gave her a sad smile. “I didn’t imagine it any other way.” She held out her hand, Jasmine held it with care, and they went hand in hand to supper.
Once beside her bunk, she noticed Lightning was missing. She asked Spitfire, “Hey Spits, where’s Lightning?” (New paragraph) The fire themed Pegasus looked back and said. “Some of the black uniform guard guys said that they wanted to talk to her again. It’s been awhile, so she should be back soon.” (New paragraph) Dash frowned at that, but before she could say anymore the door nearest them to the outside was opened by a guard. He looked over the Pegasi in the room while holding the door wide open for two of his buddies. They were carrying something and it took a moment for Dash to see it was another one of them unconscious. They laid her limp body on the empty bed across from Dash, then without saying a word left.
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That's... quite the odd time-skip.
Why not four days, and then a week? Or one week later, and have the tiny work-out scene in that same day?
I'm just not seeing the logic in doing things chronologically the above way.
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Fun Fact: in the old days people used to exercise by lifting church bells. As you can imagine, though, those were noisy and far too big for casual exercise. Sooo... Somebody came up with much smaller "bells"that didn't make any sound, hence, dumb bels.
this story just keeps getting better and better omg alicorn Twilight maybe .
No, you didn't.
Tom has never seen the store as he was at work/home when Jessica bought the costumes. I can see how Tom can assume childrens costumes there considering MLP is a kids show but he can not claim to have seen anything in the shop.
I do realize I am commenting on a 1.5+ year old chapter but THAT bugged me so much while reading.
8169873 fixed.
The real TW or another costume?
Seriously, as paranoid as America government is I can imagen they close the eye for this and claim innocents later.