I'll take a Rainbow Dash for him. Will that be a problem?”
The man cackled at the choice. “Miss with that choice you are my kind of woman and no absolutely no problem at all.

Discord looked over the planet with a gleeful smile. While he promised Sun Butt and Fluttershy that he wouldn't use his chaos in Equestira except for harmless pranking or when the need arises but neither ever said anything about other worlds and he needed to vent it somewhere. So he found this quaint little planet. It got his attention by the fact it had a show based off Purple Smart and her friends adventures. It was too perfect. Posing as a sale man across the globe he sold his so called suits to any interested. Well they were more then just suits and a smile came on his lips.

Yeah. don't trust the Merchant. And also,

“These costumes were design to be adaptive for any body.” Jasmine winced at that. That sounded expensive. She make work at the jewelry store and her attention to detail allowed her win the pool game she wasn't rich.

“How much will those cost?” She asked fearfully.

“No worries this stuff is made out of new materials that are cheap to make. Both together are forty bucks.”

as the old saying goes, if something seems too good to be true...

"Said a tall elderly man with a beard and gray hair."

Oh hi Discord, I wasn't expecting to see you in this story although I guess it makes sense for you to be there to make the costumes "fit".

And at the end, it's revealed to be him anyways.... sheesh, so much for interpreting.

Oh and Admiral, you DEFINITELY need an editor, at the end, there were many instances of Tom switching between first and third person narration. Which hurts a lot of people's brains.

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as the old saying goes, if something seems too good to be true...

It probably is.

Get rekt you scrub she bought the the suit from the traveling salesman. Amazing story bt dubs I'll post a link to mine when I type it up

Huh. Would have pegged Jasmine to be cosplaying Applejack...

I'll go with the first part for the chapter's changes.

Here are the changes:

He line up a shot and manage to get his solid color ball into the middle pocket.

He line up a shot and managed to get his solid color ball into the middle pocket.

prank war between them. So it was no surprise that as he was about to hit the cue ball she made a very suggesting pose and he lost his concentration.

prank war between them. So it was no surprise that as he was about to hit the cue ball she made a very suggesting pose and he lost his concentration.

The cue ball went of a bit, while still hitting the targeted ball it bounced off the sides instead of going into the corner pocket as he planned.

The cue ball went off a bit, while still hitting the targeted ball it bounced off the sides instead of going into the corner pocket as he planned.

“Maybe but now I have a turn at the table.” Tom took a nearby seat and she aimed her shot.

“Maybe, but now I have a turn at the table.” Tom took a nearby seat and she aimed her shot.

“That's the perk of you girls. You make distractions with just your bodies.”

“That's the perk of you girls. You make distractions with just your bodies.”

You love my body but more importantly you love me the person.”

You love my body, but more importantly, you love me in person.”

“That's not true. While you certainly aren't football material your certain not him either.”

“That's not true. While you certainly aren't football material you're certain not him either.”

That will be all for now.

There were some parts where the narration switched from 3rd, to 1st person. Kind of shook my focus.

Like it so far.

6447938 that's the point. I troll.

6533139 that you do indeed!

I will skip talking about the plot after reading just one chapter, it would be unjust, but I fell taht I have to point out that you shifted perspective a couple of times: you went from third person narrator to first person. Now, it didn't disturb the flow too much, but it is wrong. Please, check it out, it will make this fic much better

Is it bad that i want this suit? If these are out there someone tell me pls and link ?

Thank you

6827323 it wouldn't be hard to make with the right fabric. the boobs might be harder unless you can get silicon or a very light weight water proof fabric. the head would be the hardest part

This is gonna be fun

Ilove this so far and can't wait to see what happens next.

Why was my comment deleted, given that one half was me using a survey to show that something stated by a character is close to true, while the other, if I remember correctly, was talking about things which were grammatically incorrect? After all, a person who sells things is called a salesman, not a sale man. For what reason would it have been deleted?

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I don't like those kinds of comments.

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I don't know what the original comment said, but this sounds like you delete criticism. You legitimately need to work on your grammar and spelling, it's highly distracting and makes many of your stories barely readable. I mean at least get an editor.

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I just not a fan of grammar corrections like that. if to critize, do so on the story merits not the grammar.

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You don't criticize merits. You criticize flaws. Like grammatical mistakes in writing. You praise merits, because merits are good things. Asking that commenters focus on the story's merits is just confirming the statement one of your critics made, that you delete criticism.

my jacket to have something to carry my keys

He shut the door and was about to turn around to lock it when he felt a tug.

This reminds me of a story where Discord was a really brutal villain, sending the MLP ponies to earth and morph them into humans.
Imagen you just watched MLP the kid show and wake up as a pony with the memories coming slowly back.
I get a similar feeling here. Cool