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This is a very sweet story and very well written! While I wasn't looking, I didn't notice any errors that stuck out which made the story and the words flow quite well.
I would definitely like to see a continuation of this story if you are willing to do so.
Needless to say, your getting a like and a favorite from me, excellent work!
Very cute story. I particularly like the emphasis on Twilight leaning towards being treated in such a way as 'feeling safe' and being 'free of worries'. Twilight is typically a basket case about being so responsible and reliable and smart and so many other things that, truly, it would make sense that she'd deep-down desire to have all those things stripped away for awhile.
Your execution was very good, too. It wasn't rushed, forced, or without making logical sense. The entity was simply a manifestation of Twilight's deep seeded feelings of wanting to have a break from being, well, Twilight. Having made mention of Cadence certainly further validates your tale.
You also did great to focus on just 'enjoying the moment'. You didn't force anything too intense for the initial effort. You let the primary purpose of being treated in such a way play through. This can open the door to further 'experimentation' but you didn't go over-the-top for a first time given, through the story, this was Twi's first true effort to free herself from feeling so mentally overwhelmed.
Great job!
This was adorable, and I can't say anything better about it than Yosh-E-O already did.
The detail of Mary being shaped by Twilight's image of Cadance is a nice touch. Great work, hope to see more! 
She summoned the essence of Mary Poppins.
Sequel,sequel,SEQUEL!!!REEEEESSEEXJRJFOFKVOKFKFKFFKFFO
This was so adorable.
. I would love to see a sequel.
Moar poof! Moar padding! Moar diapers in general!
if only I had a companion like this, born of my own psyche.
Nice little story. I'd love to read more about them.
Such a wonderful and cute story excellent job
I really enjoyed this :). I'd love to see a sequel or other padded fics from you.
Solid and inoffensive enough. I read it a week or two ago and recall it essentially being "That was a decent way to spend some time reading" and not much else. Skimming it now to remind myself of it, I can say it's fairly innocent fluff and does an acceptable job of being 'cute'. There's some presence of Character Versus Self conflict with Twilight getting over the thought of wearing diapers, but it's not really fleshed out in a way that is with noting besides the fact that it exists.
Overall, could use some more meat on the bones and a stronger narrative style, but is still far better than the average story in this niche.
May your quill stay sharp and its ink never dry.
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Hey, thanks! I really appreciate the honesty and the critique! It's super awesome of you, man.
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Welcome. I hope to see more from you soon. Give me something to sink my teeth into and I might be motivated to offer some more in-depth advice ;)
I would love to see her diaper gotten lot bigger!
Ooh this is super cute already. I love it so far. Super sweet and made me smile. Good work.
Super duper cute! Lovely lil stpry
quite an interesting start to this story