"Perfection is impossible, yet striving for it is possible."
Derpy, a mailmare that's been in service to Ponyville for a few months now, was always getting ridiculed for her clumsiness. Today was the last straw for her.
With Twilight's help, Derpy manages to fix herself. But was this really for the better?
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Very great, well-written story. I really liked the way you put a moral at the end, it gave the story a nice touch.
But I found a few mistakes:
I think you meant Twilight at that part.
You need to delete apostrophe in it's
You need a space between after and all.
You should try italicizing both of those thoughts.
7230484 Thanks for the tips!
Eh, it was one of the first stories I've done. Man, can't believe people are still reading this, even after a year of it being up.
Yeah, made some honest mistakes. I'll clean those up. And, my adventure stories are the real cream of the crop on my page. You should check em out! (In order, of course.
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