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Starwind Dood

Joined October 2011
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A love triangle is made as Carrot Top and Little Strongheart compete for Braeburn's affection, and life will never be the same again! Derpy gets a taste of cowpony life as she integrates herself into a new town and Dinky will never be taken seriously with her mother around to treat her like a foal. Join our favorite background ponies in some frontier life, adventure, and even romance?

First Published
28th Nov 2011
Last Modified
27th Jan 2013

Comments ( 206 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 138w, 19h ago · · ·

In the words of Optimus Prime, "By the All-Spark that is just fucking precious."  It was well written, funny and was sweet enough to give you diabetes. It's weird because you kinda want everyone to win.

Peace Out.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 137w, 6d ago · · ·

Mature Dinky is best Dinky.

#3 · Chapter 1 · 137w, 4d ago · · ·

THIS.IS.SOOOOO.GOOD!:pinkiehappy:

#4 · Chapter 1 · 137w, 4d ago · · ·

Great job.:pinkiehappy:

#5 · Chapter 1 · 137w, 3d ago · · ·

I really love this story!:pinkiehappy:

Keep up the great work!:twilightsmile:

#6 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 21h ago · · ·

"...You Caught Slim Jim."

"Ooh, Yeeeeaaah!"

Why the fuck is this story so fucking wonderful.

It's well written, hilarious, and heartwarming all at the same time.

I wanna see a spin off series: Ditzy and Strongheart Bounty Hunters. I really like the friendship chemistry between the two of them. This chapter was great because it gave us a focus on Ditzy and Little Strongheart and really fleshed out their characters.

Peace Out

RIP Macho Man.    

#8 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 7h ago · · ·

Okay, that was hilarious. I love the friendship that popped up between Ditzy and Little Strongheart.

(It's Ditzy / not Ditsy. A Z remember.)

Also, Ditzy getting Strongheart's name wrong reminds me a lot of Dragon Ball Abridged (Team Four Star)

Isn't that right little green?

"My name is Dende." :pinkiehappy:

#9 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 5h ago · · ·

>>77603

Shoot! Need to go buy some z now.

#10 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 4h ago · · ·

Another Kick ass chapter boss

#11 · Chapter 2 · 135w, 3h ago · · ·

You should really focus more on the RIVALRY between Strongheart and Carrot Top, not the friendship between Ditzy and everyone else.

#12 · Chapter 3 · 134w, 2d ago · · ·

Nice chapter. :twilightsmile:

However, there's a mistake here:

"By the way, where's your partner, Ditzy?"

"She said she had to pick up some important mail in Ponyville. She told me she would be back at lunch time," Ditzy answered.

#13 · Chapter 3 · 134w, 2d ago · · ·

>>87213

Thanks for the heads up. Very embarrassed that made it past all the edits.

#14 · Chapter 3 · 133w, 6d ago · · ·

Hey Starwind, I hope you keep up with this story, it's using a few characters you don't see every day and i've really enjoyed it thus far! Way to go, and keep it coming!

#15 · Chapter 1 · 133w, 5d ago · · ·

nemryn

Mature Dinky is best Dinky!

#16 · Chapter 3 · 133w, 5d ago · · ·

Fancy Pants is most well mannered Canterlot pony.

#17 · Chapter 3 · 133w, 5d ago · · ·

Also, " 'I just wanted to apologize (not apologies) again,' Little Strongheart admitted."

#18 · Chapter 1 · 133w, 12h ago · · ·

Aww Yeah! Background ponies unite for a grand adventure! I don't know who to cheer for though...

So I'll just compensate with this.

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

AAAAAAAaaAAAAAAAAPLEOOSA!

We seriously need a Braeburn emoticon.

#19 · Chapter 3 · 132w, 6d ago · · ·

Pokerface Dinky is best Dinky.

#20 · Chapter 2 · 131w, 6d ago · · ·

Nice chapter! Fully descriptive personalities really bring your characters to life!

Also...exploding twice?:rainbowhuh:

I saw what ye did thar. :rainbowkiss:

-PwnyBrony

#21 · Chapter 3 · 131w, 1d ago · · ·

That awkward moment when Braeburn turns out to be a pimp.

#22 · Chapter 1 · 130w, 18h ago · · ·

I  have never read a fanfic with a maturing Dinky, and... by god, this looks awesome.

Dinky:

"Call me cute and I'll bite you,"

Dot from Animaniacs:

"call me dottie and you die"

#23 · Chapter 3 · 130w, 16h ago · · ·

Wow, amazing work. I would recommend trying to rephrase "By the way, where's your partner, Ditzy?". It sounds like Ditzy is being addressed, rather than being the subject matter.

Other than that, one big middle finger for you for keeping me up too late, reading yet another amazing fanfic.

Live long and prosper,

AnOddRadish

#24 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

Ummm... I think I know where this is going and this includes a new girl for Braeburn :derpytongue2: nice chapter BTW :twilightsmile:

#25 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

Is it just me, or is Braeburn just playin it up? Kissing both on the cheek outta nowhere like that, its as if he KNOWS....

#26 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 3d ago · · ·

good guy fancy pants ftw

#27 · Chapter 4 · 129w, 2d ago · · ·

I said their would be a chapter every month and I meant it! :flutterrage:

#28 · Chapter 4 · 129w, 2d ago · · ·

I really enjoy this fanfic and your Tales of Crossfic. Both are amazing in their display :pinkiehappy:

#29 · Chapter 4 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Great chapter. I like that we now know something about their past. :heart:

#30 · Chapter 4 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Eh, for me, the bratty Dinky you have in the fic kind of hurts it a bit for me. I'm not a fan of brats even on the best of occasions.

#31 · Chapter 2 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

"Derpy, what would you like for breakfast?"

"JUSTICE!"

*chokehold*

"Oh, and some muffins please!":derpyderp2:

#32 · Chapter 4 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Loving the story! Keep it up!

#33 · Chapter 4 · 129w, 7h ago · · ·

I feel for Carrot Top. I'm just like her. I'm single, and I'm looking for misses right...Still haven't found her though...or any girl to like me.

#34 · Chapter 4 · 129w, 6h ago · · 1 ·

>>175195

I'm no love guru and am single myself, but I will say don't give up. It's a world of people out there.

#35 · Chapter 4 · 128w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

What's strange about this story is that the chapters progressively get worse and worse. The first chapter got me all riled-up and VERY interested in the love triangle between Carrot, Strongheart, and Braeburn. What I wanted to see, more than anything, was for you to build on the triangle for awesome dramatic and romantic effects. Your second chapter, however, left me disappointed, as it focused on Derpy and Strongeheart finding a job, of all things. In your third chapter, you damn near destroyed any hopes of a dwamatic wuv twiangle because you made Carrot and Little Strongheart to be best friends or something. By this point, you should change the story's summary to them becoming best friends and having silly little misadventures in Appleloosa instead of what you have already. But your fourth chapter sucked even MORE energy and suspense from the story by describing a very petty scene of Breaburn running around like a doofus trying to get Carrot all better. Honestly, I felt like you wasted a lot of energy (and a lot of time) writing that particular chapter. It really serves no purpose to the story. It did not progress the story at all, it was just filler that, for some reason, was pages and pages long. I honestly believe that if you deleted the chapter, no significant changes to the story would be present.

Now, I know you are trying to write a silly comedy/romance thing, which is fine, I can respect that. But really, you are almost completely leaving out the ROMANCE part of the whole deal, save for some references to Carrot and Strongheart's crush. You are making the story fall flat, which is a disappointment, because I really REALLY liked your first chapter and saw great potential in it.  

#36 · Chapter 4 · 128w, 4d ago · · 1 ·

>>182659

This is not a story focused around a high-drama love-triangle. There will be chapters that focus on the relationship dynamic between the three, but they are not the total focus of the story and there will be lots of chapters that focus on other characters' relationships with one another: Derpy, Dinky, and Silverstar to name a few. Regardless, I hope you found some enjoyment in all this.

#37 · Chapter 1 · 127w, 3d ago · · ·

A Braeburn and Little Strongheart fanfiction? :yay:

You lie.

#38 · Chapter 4 · 127w, 1d ago · · ·

Darn it... This is well done, you're giving lots of detail for our two leading ladies and its making it harder to decide which I like more. I like that you're allowing all these plots to develop slowly at their own pace instead of rushing any of them. It's more natural that way.

#39 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

As the knight said in Indiana Jones and The Last Crusade "He Has chosen poorly." I actually feel bad for Strongheart, It was a scientist vs. The chief's adoptive daughter.  I hope this doesn't effect her friendship with Ditzy Doo, because they are like an awesome buddy cop movie team. My only question about any fic featuring Aplleloosa is where are the dragons if the buffalo respect them then I'd assume there'd be a couple of them at least.That's how Strongheart could get braeburn is by ridding on Falcor.

Peace Out.

#40 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

Poor Strongheart, really have to feel for the girl. Especially since some alcohol was involved in the Kiss between Carrot and Braeburn. I hope it doesn't effect the Derpy/Strongheart friendship. Loving the story Star. Maybe we can get one earlier than in a month?

#41 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

I am so glad I'm tracking this fic.

#42 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

Ah, alcohol...the cause of 90% of all awkward moments and misconceptions.

#43 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

>>272997

I know! I'm mega-original like that!

#44 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

this was sadly bound to happen:pinkiesad2: but its not over yet so well just have to see what happens now:eeyup:

#45 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

>>272896 i agree with ya on all parts there it would indeed be nice if the next chapter was within a month but its well written so that may be why it took so long (just an idea here:twilightsheepish:)

#46 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

I really enjoyed this. Especially the part that involved Carrot Top winning over Little Strongheart.

As for critique - what can I say? I think this is a brilliant shipfic - maybe the best one I have read.

The characterizations are what makes this story fantastic, even those without a personality are portrayed perfectly. I would like a bit more descriptions weaved into everything though.

I can hardly wait for upcoming chapters, even though I normally dislike the idea of love triangles.

#47 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·

Well, I have to say, Carrot Top should get Braeburn. I think she deserves someone like him. Not that I mean any ill will towards Little Stongheart! BY THE CELESTIAL SISTERS ABOVE NO!  I want her to be happy too, but, as it was mentioned many times, he is a bit too old for her, and I think she needs someone her own age. (That and Carrot Top reminds me a lot of...well...me. She's so lonely. All she wants is to be loved...Little Strongheart does too...OH, curse you author. Now, I don't know what to do.)

#48 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

NOOOOOO I WANT MORE...........,maybe i should freeze myself so tha........ sorry the phone is ringing be back soon.

#49 · Chapter 5 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

Is it bad that I laughed at the phrase 'Trail of Tears'? I just found it ironic do the Indian metaphor of the buffaloes.

#50 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

So AWESOME!:rainbowkiss:

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