Commander Hurricane was known for his stubbornness in all of the tribes. He always wanted to be in control of as many things as possible, and there were absolutely no exceptions. When Chancellor Pudding Head and Princess Platinum finally see the error of their ways and propose to combine the tribes into one nation, Commander Hurricane decides that he won't be cooperative with the others and flies off with Private Pansy. Before they could completely disappear, Princess Platinum, outraged by the ignorant leader, had cursed the whole pegasus race for revenge.
Centuries have passed, and everyone that has been born after the founding of Equestria had been told that Pegasi were just myths; they weren't real! Just a silly old tale told to frighten children!
Or so they thought. One trip into the Everfree Forest will change many people's minds.
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Question will we see what Commander hurricane final thoughts on the curse he help to bring to his race?
All because of his foolish pride?
Question is, how the hell do the elements work with only four bearers!?
Aha.... ahahahahaha!
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that was awesome.
Please, do continue!
6253952 Oh, I certainly hope so.
6254604 You know, I had the same question, but the idea is certainly intriguing... I'd like to see where this goes. ^^
6256722 Same here
6253952 6254604 The truth will be revealed in later chapters.
I like the world building going on here, it's neat! Also, since there are no Wonderbolts, what does Rainbow Dash aspire to be in the future if she's a knight? Or is that her direct occupation in this society?
6258053 Since Pegasopolis is so strictly set up, every pegasus's future is set once they chose which group they want to join. Of course, Scootaloo, Fluttershy, and Dash do sneak out some mornings to go to the edge of the forest, but since they've been surrounded by people with that mindset, it's stuck in their brains that they only aspire to be a knight or in Fluttershy's case, a healer. : )
what kind curse?
Yay, you updated~! I'm curious about how things are without the hood. XD What's the pegasi life like at night?
Huh, one child per family? That doesn't really work for a society that is supposedly constantly at war and trying to expand its borders. Alot of people die in constant warfare, so you'd think it would be opposite and they'd be required to have, like, 3-4 kids per family.
Wow...this actually got an update? I thought this was dead...
well,nice chapter none the less! I really hope there's no more tea related accidents in the future...
Yay, an update! ^^
6618514 hehehe...me neither XD
That chase scene was intense, even though it's pretty short.
6790485 I'm happy that you liked it!
Haven't read this yet, but everyone in this story is a human, right? So why are they still referred to by "fillies and colts" and such?
Another great chapter!
was expecting for the ponies to get the demons thing wrong
but apparently, I don't know anymore
Ahh, so this is the curse Princess Platinum had cast on the pegasi. Fun.
7006084 Haha yep. Much fun.
CRUSE YOU PRINCESS PLATINUM!
I do hope things end well for all parties involved.
Well that went good....
This is really going some interesting places.
Ugggh stupid cliffhangers
I just realized that Cadence isn't a princess and wasn't Twilight's foal sitter since she was originally a Pegasus
I don't say this normall but:
Damn, that ending.
This is literally the first story I have ever read where Scootaloo, humanized or not, AU or not, has EVER actually committed murder. Or at least the first one I can remember reading.
Sure, it was to protect RD and Flutters, but still...
Also, glad to see this fic is still alive.
8105576 Yeah, sorry about not being active, but the story will never die! It will just take time to write. Also, prepare for more death and destruction in the future! Muhahahahaha! (I really do hope you and the other readers will like how the story turns out)
8105583 I'm pretty sure I will.
Holy crap, AWESOME!!!
Scootaloo's being a badass.
Seriously looking forward for more!
8105658 I'm happy to hear that!
8105663 My long waiting was actually worth it.
I just realized how much the curse is like the one in Shrek but more powerful
8112043 I didn't even see Shrek but that's cool!
Look, don’t me wrong, this story sounds awesome and I will read it eventually, but there’s one thing that I don’t get. Just how can one be a human and a Pegasus at the same time?
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Technically, they aren't pegasi because pegasi would need to be winged horses, but I made the story so that the humans with wings were just referred to as pegasi becuase it makes everything easier to write. I'm sorry if it's confusing.
Woo! A new chapter! You are the best!
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Pinkie's complete disregard of the fact that the guards were murdered bothers me.
"I know they kill at the first sign of suspicion, but if we are just nice to them they won't!"
hmm yeah ok.
I realize there needs to be dramatic build up, but at this point I'm just kind of impatient for the inevitable confrontation.
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That's something I will explain in later chapters, but if you want to know what happens: Pinkie met a pegasus when she was a child and then something happened that made her understand why Pegasi act the way they do. The "something that happens" will be explained in the story since I don't want to give too much of it away.
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Don't worry! Next chapter will have a lot of stuff happen! Trust me, it'll be worth waiting!
Like the story so far... Although I have to say that your dialogues need some work... It feels kinda unnatural and forced also you don't describe enough. Tell us what the characters do while they speak. What kinda expression do they have? How to a smaller hair intonation and so on...
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I'll keep that in mind! Thanks for the tips
Yes. We must get Gak. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) Hehehehe-
... I'll stop laughing now.
God dammit Twilight. JUST LISTEN, WHY DON'T CHA?
Finish the story also TWILIGHT YOU ARE STUPID AND DEAF
Finish the story, then edit it.
Also, Twilight's going to regret that decision.
This was certainly an interesting chapter.