Ok, gotta say, interesting setup, good flow, and pretty decent characterization. I take it that Twilight has already moved to ponyville, and that these events in the story are happening around the same time as the events of the canterlot wedding in the original timeline/universe. It could be a little clearer on that regard, but other than that, so far, so good.
Ok, gotta say, interesting setup, good flow, and pretty decent characterization. I take it that Twilight has already moved to ponyville, and that these events in the story are happening around the same time as the events of the canterlot wedding in the original timeline/universe. It could be a little clearer on that regard, but other than that, so far, so good.
Interesting, I've got to say I'm half expecting the story to get darker from here but I don't know what to expect. I'd say this a good opening chapter