Foresight to... Telepathy? AKA: The Discovery of The Telepathic Web

Celestia can't sleep so she goes to see Twilight, then Luna joins them, and Twilight invites cadence over, all due to a fuzzy feeling in their stomachs. Rated teen for a couple swear words, and some references to holes in hooves.

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melody5697

melody5697 #1 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · ·

What did Luna tell Twilight and Cadence? I really really wanna know!

MylittleObjection718

MylittleObjection718 #2 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · ·

Other than the grammar and spelling mistakes, this is a great story!

MylittleObjection718

MylittleObjection718 #3 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · ·

6212847

In fact, it is amazing for a first story!!

Jeffrey1225

Jeffrey1225 #4 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · ·

6212859 Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you liked it! Any mistakes you could point out? I read over this at three AM :P So I probably missed a bunch, Thanks!

,Jeffrey1225

MylittleObjection718

MylittleObjection718 #5 · Jul 16th, 2015 · 1 · ·

What if she she was kidnapped, She looked at them with the intent to kill, she yell

What if she she was kidnapped, She looked at them with the intent to kill, she yelled

After a second to put there heads on straight the informed

After a second to put their heads on straight they informed

Relieved Luna apologized to the guards for disturbing them, and told them she was to follow her sister.

Relieved, Luna apologized to the guards for disturbing them, and told them she was to follow her sister.

you were not asleep, after failing to find you in your room and nearly sendong half the barracks into cardiac arrest,

you were not asleep, after failing to find you in your room and nearly sending half the barracks into cardiac arrest,

That is... unusuall

That is... unusual

Wait. Neither of you could sleep either? That is... unusuall I couldn't sleep either. Do you all have this fuzzy feeling in your stomachs?"

Wait. Neither of you could sleep either? That is... unusual I also couldn't. Do you all have this fuzzy feeling in your stomachs?"

"Cadence, we all have this fuzzy feeling, and were all alicorns,

"Cadence, we all have this fuzzy feeling, and we're all alicorns,

"But that only is when one of us has it" Luna interupted, finishing Celestias train of thought. "When we both had it," gesturing to herself and her sister, "it meant nothing major, but we have never had an encounter where more then two alicorns have experienced this, but if Cadence has it too, well Faust knows whats happening." Twilight finished writing the letter and had sent it to Cadence.

"But that was only when one of us had it," Luna interupted, finishing Celestia's train of thought. "When we both had it," gesturing to herself and her sister, "It meant nothing major. We've never had an encounter where more than two alicorns have experienced this, but if Cadence has it too, well Faust knows whats happening." Twilight finished writing the letter and had sent it to Cadence.

Cadence, in fact was not roused from sleep, well because she was never sleeping in the first place, she had the feeling in her gut.

Cadence, in fact was not roused from sleep, because she was never sleeping in the first place, she had that same feeling in her gut.

Oh nothing just reading the seals, here"

Oh nothing, just reading the seals, here"

Dear Princess Cadence,
Celestia Luna and I have experienced an unusuall feeling

Dear Princess Cadence,
Celestia, Luna and I have experienced an unusual feeling

Yours , Princess Twilight Sparkle
Cadece sighged, and poofed the letter into her archives.

Yours Truly, Princess Twilight Sparkle
Cadence sighed, and poofed the letter into her archives.

Poof she was gone. Shining armour sighed to hisself and went back to bed, just before another letter came through and broke another glass off of the shelf.

Poof she was gone. Shining Armour sighed to himself and went back to bed, just before another letter came through and broke another glass on the shelf.

Celestia and Luna drinking tea, and herd what seemed

Celestia and Luna drinking tea, and heard what seemed

Twilight!!! Ugggggg Get on track me!!!

Twilight!!! Ugggggg Get on track!!!

And this air on the name of Faust this air is dreadful!"

And this air, on the name of Faust, this air is dreadful!"

princesses were setting

princesses were sitting

Luna and Celestia sat equally awkwardly, "Hello" hey both said together.

Luna and Celestia sat equally awkwardly, "Hello" they both said together.

"Overanxious

"Over-anxious

Cadence sighed and grabbed Twilight in her magic and brought her into the sitting room, and sat her down, and poured her tea, and put two sugar cubes, and two spoons of milk in.

Cadence sighed;grabbed Twilight in her magic; brought her into the sitting room; sat her down; poured her tea and put two sugar cubes and two spoons of milk in.

She at least remembered how to make Twilights tea from when she foal-sat her.

Atleast she remembered how to make Twilight's tea from when she foal-sat her.

"Ah! Cadence you got here! I'm guessing since you came you have the fuzzies too?"

"Ah! Cadence, you got here! I'm guessing since you came, you have the fuzzies too?"

sciency weincy machine.

sciency-weincy machine.

her hoves, which were white due to the pulse takers. He immediatly ran over with a couple of bandages. He quickly wrapped them around her hoves where the cuffs were.

her hooves, which were white (due to the pulse takers). He immediatly ran over with a couple of bandages. He quickly wrapped them around her hooves, where the cuffs had been.

on she immeadeatly went to the couch in the basement and fell asleep.

on, so she immediately went to the couch in the basement and fell asleep

her attenting

her attention

with an crash

with a crash

Spike, whats going on?"

Spike, wha'ts going on?"

her hoves

her hooves

Well Twi I should ask

Well Twi, I should ask

Twilight hearn this, did a double take, and the gasped.

Twilight heard this, did a double take, and then gasped.

to convince Celestia what you did was OK."

to convince Celestia that what you did was OK."

"Why....."
"Well she wakes up in about.. 3. 2. 1."

"Why.....?"
"Well, she wakes up in about.. 3. 2. 1."

sleep for any reason,

sleep for some reason,

Well I sense my sister is hungry..."
"And I sense Twilight is too!"

Well I sense my that sister is hungry..."
"And I sense that Twilight is too!"

something embarrassing about Celestia that you would never want somepony else to hear!"

something embarrassing about Celestia, that you would never want somepony else to hear!"

Celestia palend into an even whiter version of herself, and look at Luna with fear, and Twilight with dread, or was it anger?

Celestia turned into an even whiter version of herself, then look at Luna with fear, and Twilight with dread - or was it anger?

shits

then

Than

That's about it, other than one or two punctuation mistakes that I cannot he bothered to do because
I already spent 1 hour and a half writing this. Hope this helped, also this is a great story ;) I haven't proof read this, so feel free to question/ correct/ object about what I've said. I love the plot to this story, and it is very humorous

Jeffrey1225

Jeffrey1225 #6 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · ·

6213302 Wow. Thanks, that is dedication, I'll edit it now

MylittleObjection718

MylittleObjection718 #7 · Jul 17th, 2015 · · ·

6213335
No problem, I'm just glad that I helped :)

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